How the Cookie Crumbles

Life and scribbles on the far side of SIXTY-FIVE

Flash in the Pan – Squeak

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Autumn’s early light creeped through the bedroom window. Destiny bolted awake.

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“W-who’s there?”

“Trick or treat my lovely.”

“You. . .”

A squeak intruded.

Thwack. The intruder crashed to the floor—his dagger abandoned.

“Who are you?” she stammered.  Her hand clutched her throat.

 “Cut! Print it.”   

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Click http://mommasmoneymatters.com/flash-fiction/ for the rules of this challenge.

The word limit for Squeak is 75 words. I have used 47.

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Author: Let's CUT the Crap!

I'm getting a little LONG in the tooth and have things to say about---ouch---AGEing. I believe it's certainly a state of mind but sometimes it's nice to hear that you're NORMAL. I enjoy reading by the truckload. I'm a grandma but I don't feel OLD although I'm not so young anymore. My plan is to stick it out as long as I can on this lovely planet and only will leave it kicking and screaming!

25 thoughts on “Flash in the Pan – Squeak

  1. A scary scene in more ways than one. 🙂 Only 47 words? Great!

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  2. 47 words! you’ve taken this to a whole new level, excellent.

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  3. Oh wow!!!
    This was so cool 😉

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  4. Thrilling.
    And getting shorter all the time! I’m always wrestling to edit myself down to 100.

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  5. Nice one, Tess! I’ve got to a 100 word limit, my next target is 50… could I try 40 or 47 like you? I don’t know! I don’t even know about 50…

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  6. Ha! Totally reminded me of an old black and white film. Nicely done!

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  7. I like this one a lot my friend,
    but then again it is right up my
    street as it were 🙂 Brilliant…

    Andro xx

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  8. This is excellent, you had me!

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  9. Interesting. Being a story person, I’m thinking..so did he get her? If so, why’d he drop his dagger? What was the squeak – was that the victim? So many dumb questions, so little time…But clever story!

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  10. Love the suspense! Have no idea why WP did not ping this back, but you are all linked up and in the book 😉 You are sticking to the low limits. Have you checked out the Hot Flash yet? xxx

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    • Hi Red. Take a BREATH, woman. OK. Now, I thank you and am not techie enough to know why no ping back. The last round, I linked to the word ie: Squeak. Can’t seem to do it this round.

      How do you manage to be EVERYwhere?

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    • I did notice the Hot Flash and am intrigued. My days have been chopped up into mis-managed pieces lately. Do want to try the challenge, and I will. BTW, I’m going to try to stay in touch next month but have signed up for NaNoWriMo. How about you? (silly question with all you have on your plate.)

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      • I do not sign up for nanowrimo, but I am going to write another book in November (a sequel). I also am doing Movember, finishing the new site, launching the RP blog, sifting the slush pile and probably putting the finishing touches on the book I am releasing in April…plus I need to look at my calendar because that cannot possibly be all I have to do. *sigh*

        If you did not catch it from the WS Recap post, I am double interviewing the authors between the two sites.

        I have to figure out how to warp time. I miss the blogosphere. ❤

        And you will love the Hot Flashes. November's will be out early so everyone has time to try it and December before all the holiday jazz begins 😉

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      • Nice to hear from you, Red. How do you do it? This is my first crack at nanowrimo to see if I can last…something new to try. Of course everything else has to go into hybernation.

        Yes, I’m also interested in the hot flashes. I’m going to be missing in action soon but will try to come back for the flashes. Will be sending out notice soon.

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  11. This is great, Tess. You got me!

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