How the Cookie Crumbles

An irreverant view of life after SIXTY-FIVE

(3X) Flash in the Pan – Fire

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Another snowstorm loomed; phones silenced. Nothing from her mother for two weeks. Millie packed her car with homemade soup, stews, coffee, and blizzard essentials.

The house appeared neglected; no smoke curled from the chimney. Icicles, like daggers, hung like custodians.“Mother—mother?!The house creaked, as frigid as a tomb. Her mother lay buried under mountains of covers.

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“Mother?” Millie stroked, massaged, prayed.

Eyes staring, lips working, the woman stirred. “That’s right,” her daughter said. “Here’s coffee. I’ll help you.”

Millie kneaded her mother’s shoulders. “I’ll start a fire…be right back.”

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Click http://mommasmoneymatters.com/flash-fiction/ for the rules of this challenge.

The word limit for Fire is 125 words. I used 93.

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Bill blew the horn. Marnie peeked out her car window. He grabbed her for a quick embrace.

“Quit it, Bill, they’ll be out in a minute.”

“What a wet blanket.” He grinned. “Alright, how about a word game? Orange.”

She pouted. “Pumpkin.”“Cards…”

“Thank you.”“Hm, interesting—”“Boring…”80px-Bell_Reignac“I meant interesting answer. ‘Bill’…”

“Ring”

“What? Say again…”

“You said bell and I said ring.”

He squinted, blue eyes calculating, and chewed on a hangnail. “I ain’t buying you no ring for Christmas.”

“Oh, get a life!” Marnie bolted; car door smashed shut.

Click http://mommasmoneymatters.com/flash-fiction/ for the rules of this challenge.

The word limit for Ring is 100 words. I used 92.

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The harried staff dashed and whirled, moped and polished, grumbled and smiled. Discordant voices buzzed in the air.

“Pickup—two turkeys,” Nick hollered at Angel. “Pickup, pick up.

The fat cook, red-eyed and tired, turned to the new girl. “Hurry with those pastries. More clean plates please.” He turned back to the window.

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“Pickup—one tender.”Where the f**k’s that shell? “Hey, kid, did you see my turkey carcass?”

“Yep, I dumped it in the garbage.”

“What?” he growled, “Fish it out. I’m making turkey soup tomorrow.”

“There’s cigarette ashes—“

“So wash it!”

Click http://mommasmoneymatters.com/flash-fiction/ for the rules of this challenge.

The word limit for Fish is 100 words. I used 94.

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Author: Let's CUT the Crap!

I'm getting a little LONG in the tooth and have things to say about---ouch---AGEing. I believe it's certainly a state of mind but sometimes it's nice to hear that you're NORMAL. I enjoy reading by the truckload. I'm a grandma but I don't feel OLD although I'm not so young anymore. My plan is to stick it out as long as I can on this lovely planet and only will leave it kicking and screaming!

28 thoughts on “(3X) Flash in the Pan – Fire

  1. Excellent, I like the first one best, so emotive! The second has a character that annoyed me so that has to be good and the last one – I can imagine that happening and that’s disgusting!!!

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  2. “Hung like custodians.” Brilliant.

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  3. hey… 3 flash in one post… I did something like this too recently 😉

    The first one is my fav…so warm and full of emotion.

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  4. I especially liked the second one 😉
    But, as always, they were all very succinct and clearly to the point 😉
    Brilliant writing Tess!

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  5. The fire of love: beautiful! Makes me think of my mother who also lives on her own, and quite far away.
    Very touching.

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  6. Aww; Serves him right!; and Ewwwwwwwwwww!.

    I love it. All three of them. I love the conversations your characters have. ❤

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    • Hi, Red. I agree with you: Aww; Serves him right!; and Ewwwwwwwwwww!
      I’m pleased you enjoy my attempts to entertain. Hope all is well and Merry Christmas. I mention this now as I’ve been known to get scatter-brained when I’m busy and boy, Christmastime is busy…

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  7. This is a trio of excellence,
    I like these a lot my friend 🙂

    If I don’t see you before the
    Christmas holiday then do
    have a most exciting time 🙂

    Andro

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  8. Tess, you really do capture the emotion and dynamics of a whole relationship in just a few words, with very realistic dialogue. Excellent storytelling!

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  9. they’re all good but the last one’s outstandingly yucky, in a good way! thank god I don’t eat turkey.

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  10. I like them all! The third one is SO believable. I wonder how many times that sort of thing has happened. Anyway, excellent writing!

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