How the Cookie Crumbles

Life and scribbles on the far side of SIXTY-FIVE

Flash in the Pan: Buffet

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“Name.”

“Baker.”

“Party of six?”

“Sorry, only two—”

The hostess clamped her teeth. ?”Must phone,” she snapped.

Sally looked away. Billy’s face blossomed like a rose. He cleared his throat, lips flapped like a blow fish, but nothing came out.

“You wait.” She pointed to chairs, snapped in the air and displayed two fingers.

The noise level rose like steam over rice. Voices droned. Cutlery scraped.

Sally picked invisible fluff from her suit. She elbowed her husband. “I think she’s forgotten us, or—”

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Billy patted her lap and sprang forward. “Excuse me, Miss?”

“Not your turn.”

“The Baker table? We’ve waited ten minutes already.”

The hostess glared. Billy grinned, eyebrows raised. She snapped her fingers again. “Baker,” she barked.

The new hostess led them to the only table for two, flanking the cloakroom.

Sally smoothed her silver hair. “All this, and a Chinese Buffet. Grand. Happy New Year.”

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The word limit for Buffet is 150 words. I used all 150. Check out http://mommasmoneymatters.com/flash-fiction/ for the rules and join us.

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Author: Let's CUT the Crap!

I'm getting a little LONG in the tooth and have things to say about---ouch---AGEing. I believe it's certainly a state of mind but sometimes it's nice to hear that you're NORMAL. I enjoy reading by the truckload. I'm a grandma but I don't feel OLD although I'm not so young anymore. My plan is to stick it out as long as I can on this lovely planet and only will leave it kicking and screaming!

22 thoughts on “Flash in the Pan: Buffet

  1. Cute story Tess 😉

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  2. I hope their evening ended on a much happier note.

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  3. I love how you describe scenes, like steam over rice. Makes me want to go back and do some rewrites on the one I’m working on. Not kidding. So great to continue to learn and see new ways to express things. 🙂

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  4. Wonderful FTP 🙂

    Andro

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  5. What lovely details you share in your writing. These are always the things I want to know when I read! It’s exciting how easily you weave them into your story.

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  6. Tess, what crisp nice writing. I love the details as well. I tend to overwrite but that is my style I would suppose. Loved it.

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  7. Great one Tess. Who hasn’t been in this position before.

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  8. I like this one a lot. I could clearly visualize the story in my mind’s eye.

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  9. I really love this one. So realistic. Haven’t we all dealt with rude waiters or staff? It’s not a “big” subject, I know, but the small ones, when you really hit the mark, somehow seem “bigger” than all the stories about life-changing events.

    It’s great how much detail you put into seemingly stark prose. “Voices droned. Cutlery scraped.” And the fluff… 🙂

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  10. At least they got to eat, Tess. And a tale out of it as well… sometimes, meal are so uneventful! 😉 Good story!

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  11. So, my guess is a 2-star, if the food arrives without spittle.
    xxx

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