How the Cookie Crumbles

An irreverant view of life after SIXTY-FIVE

Flash in a Pan – Fork

25 Comments


“Frankieee—how’s biz?”

Black hair slicked straight back nodded once. The owner swaggered past without a glance; his white shirt glowed beneath the glossy sharkskin jacket.

“Somebody thinks he’s too good for us, eh, Big Joey:” A shoulder nudged a smidge too hard.

“Shush, Little Nick. What you on, man? I don’t want no trouble.”

Microsoft Clipart

Microsoft Clipart

“Forget it. Coming in? I’m hungry.”

“Maybe some calamari…”

“Hey Tony. Pasta, calamari, oysters.”  Joey looked around.

“Sherry! You’re fast tonight. Smells good. Thanks.”

“Enjoy boys, Big Joey.”

“Frankie, to what do I owe…?

“Nice night, eh? What did you say back there?”

“Nothing, I swear.” Big Joey sensed the watching faces.

“Yeah? You swear eh? You swear…”

“Frankie, what are you doing with that fork?”

‘I’m going to have me some steak, rare. Now you can swear all you want.”

“@*&$*%.@$?Aiyeeeee—my leg—my leg.” Big Joey’s eyes murdered Little Nick.

“Get him out!”

~ * ~

The word limit for Fork is 150 words. I used all 150. Check out http://mommasmoneymatters.com/flash-fiction/ for the rules and join us.

Advertisements

Author: Let's CUT the Crap!

I'm getting a little LONG in the tooth and have things to say about---ouch---AGEing. I believe it's certainly a state of mind but sometimes it's nice to hear that you're NORMAL. I enjoy reading by the truckload. I'm a grandma but I don't feel OLD although I'm not so young anymore. My plan is to stick it out as long as I can on this lovely planet and only will leave it kicking and screaming!

25 thoughts on “Flash in a Pan – Fork

  1. I love this. Frankie forks Big Joey! Did you leave a word out in the 4th line?

    Like

  2. Really good, Tess. Created excellent tension.

    Like

  3. Well that’s one way of keeping customers away! Nice one Tess.

    Like

  4. Oh man!!!
    I can see the whole scenario 😉

    Like

  5. Nice one! I love your little stories!

    Like

  6. Oh my, Tess he forked him! Great use and great build up!

    Like

  7. My goodness, this is really excellent! I wish all writers were this concise, and I wish I could write such snappy dialog! 🙂

    Like

  8. So much more maniacal than the routine stabbing.
    xxx

    Like

  9. Heh. I love this. Made me smile. The ending was pretty funny. 😆 Reminded me of the Sopranos, John Gotti, that type of thing.

    Like

  10. Pingback: Stick a Fork in Him (Literally), He’s Done! | Scriptor Obscura Writes

    • Thank you, thank you. I have always admired and enjoyed reading you work. Nice to see you drop in and comment.

      Like

      • Thank you so much, you’re very kind. I really enjoy your comments, and I really appreciate your support. It means a lot to me. Wanted to reblog this post, but wasn’t sure if that was OK with you. Is it? I can delete the link and then just put in a reblog. You have a knack for writing, for humor. I enjoyed looking through your blog.

        You should try the Trifecta writing challenge (hint hint, gentle nudge 😉 ). There’s one on till this Sunday at 8PM Eastern, and you only have to write thirty words (plus three that they give you that you have to use in your piece). Try it, I think you’d be really good in it. You could really win. 🙂

        Like

Some things in life are complicated. Let's keep it simple.

Please log in using one of these methods to post your comment:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out / Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out / Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out / Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out / Change )

Connecting to %s