“This is crazy.” Mandy heaved a sluggish sigh and clamped her lips tight, her hands stuck clenched in her lap. She peered across the table through thick mascaraed lashes. You’re still too handsome, and forty-four is young yet…
“Is that all you have to say, Tony? You’re tired?”
Dull blue eyes avoided hers; he thrust out his chin. “No more.”
“And me? Don’t you care about me?”
Tony looked away, his shoulders sagged.
“You’ve made no effort and no progress for two weeks.”
“Go home.” His voice grew hoarse
Stubborn tears blinded her. “Try for me, and you can walk again…”
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The word limit for Progress is 100 words. I used all of them. For the rules and to join, check out: http://mommasmoneymatters.com/flash-fiction/
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July 16, 2013 at 8:05 pm
😦 How do you evoke such emotion and tell such a story in 100 words?
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July 16, 2013 at 8:05 pm
Wow, intense. I want to know what’s going to happen. 😉
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July 16, 2013 at 9:07 pm
I admire the art of brevity and your ability to adhere to it! Wonderful story, Ms. Tess.
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July 16, 2013 at 10:59 pm
Tess, the tunnel of just these two people is so well done.
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July 17, 2013 at 7:34 am
Thank you, Kate. I’m pleased when my attempt works.
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July 17, 2013 at 12:07 pm
Whew this is very tense. A powerful topic to take on, very well done.
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July 20, 2013 at 5:25 pm
I could feel this one, Gilly.
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July 17, 2013 at 1:01 pm
Very well done Tess.
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July 18, 2013 at 7:36 am
reminds me of the lady who apparently thinks she belongs in a wheelchair even though she can walk!
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July 18, 2013 at 7:50 am
This was very good Tess. Loved how you drew to the end
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July 20, 2013 at 5:24 pm
You have made my day, Valentine. Thank you.
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July 18, 2013 at 12:35 pm
Spot. On!
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July 20, 2013 at 5:24 pm
Glad if you like it.
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July 21, 2013 at 10:52 am
Tragic.
I’m not sure about the “ice-blue eyes…” It’s a great phrase, and to me it suggests a lot of control, a dynamic attitude. Tony seems to have given up, withdrawn, be on the defensive – I feel that doesn’t quite gel.
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July 22, 2013 at 5:19 pm
Now that you mention it, I’ve had a rethink. You make a really GOOD point. Back to the drawing board. Thank YOU.
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July 23, 2013 at 6:54 pm
That was incredible. Never saw that ending coming. Nicely done!
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July 24, 2013 at 2:23 pm
Wow, such strength in so few words… I had to read it twice to make sure i took it all in!
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July 25, 2013 at 4:16 pm
I thank you and congratulations on your publication. Looks wonderful.
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August 10, 2013 at 2:40 pm
Very intense. I like this one. I do think Delft has a point. I wanted him not to be the quitter after “ice-blue”.
xxx
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August 11, 2013 at 12:36 pm
Have gone back to improve. Thought I had after Delft’s comment. Thank you, Red.
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