“I don’t want a birthday party.” Grandpa Charlie repeated.
“You think this party is about you?” His wife stared till her eyes crossed.
“Patsy you’re confusing me. Who else is having a birthday Saturday?”
“Most of the family are already en route.” She stroked her knotted forehead. “They want to see you.”
Eyes hooded, Charlie rose from the kitchen table. He hitched his pants and puffed out his scrawny chest. He’d shrunk to five-foot-four but still towered over his wife. Patsy gave a mischievous tug on his suspender. “Any egress plans in your future, Grandpa Charlie?”
He pecked her lips and embraced her. “So you can catch me like at my eightieth?” She laid her head on his shoulder.
“When did we get this old?”
He caressed her ample back. “Speaking of old, when the kids force us into the old folks’ home, we’ll breakout together. Deal?”
“Our own adieu.”
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The word limit for Egress is 150 words. Again, I used all 150.
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August 27, 2013 at 9:35 pm
The imagery you create with words is excellent, Tess. And, the anticipation…what’s next? Really enjoy your writing.
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August 27, 2013 at 10:28 pm
Imaginative use of an unusual word!
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August 28, 2013 at 2:04 am
I confess to looking it up to get an accurate meaning and of course you’ve used it perfectly!
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August 28, 2013 at 8:33 pm
I had no idea what the word meant when I first saw it. What a quandary…
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September 12, 2013 at 2:10 pm
You know we do that on purpose…
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August 28, 2013 at 5:46 am
In just these few words I feel like I know Charlie and Patsy. And like them. A lot. 🙂
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August 28, 2013 at 8:32 pm
Me too. I’m glad they dropped in on me. Thanks, Colleen.
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August 28, 2013 at 6:41 am
That’s nice! Yeah, break out of the old folks home and go wild!
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August 28, 2013 at 8:31 pm
I like their spirit.
🙂
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August 28, 2013 at 11:44 am
you gave that old ‘egress’ word some attitude…
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August 28, 2013 at 8:29 pm
A hard one. Had no idea what to do…
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August 28, 2013 at 1:09 pm
Good one Tess! A lesser known word, well used, and such a cute old couple 🙂
My gran and granddad was like that – them against the world 🙂
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August 28, 2013 at 8:29 pm
I have no idea where this lovely couple came from but I’m glad I met them…the story ones.
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August 29, 2013 at 6:49 am
This is great. Amazing how one word can draw such a picture. And we’re all creeping in that direction, aren’t we? Creeping? Pah! More like looking in the mirror and thinking, “Wow! Wasn’t I just twenty something? What the heck happened?” 😉
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August 29, 2013 at 12:02 pm
Thanks so much!
Yep, I’m going to crawl not run in the direction the road is leading. Bah.
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August 29, 2013 at 7:56 am
How wonderfully you have used imagry and words on this one Tess. Would that we could all be like your young couple 😉
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August 29, 2013 at 11:55 am
Thank you, Valentine.
Sigh that we could.
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August 31, 2013 at 6:35 am
When you can give people a glimpse into character’s lives you’ve created and make them want to stay. You know that you have talent.
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August 31, 2013 at 2:21 pm
You are too kind, but I thank you.
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September 12, 2013 at 2:11 pm
You nailed this one, Tess. These two are adorable.
xxx
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September 12, 2013 at 2:14 pm
It wouldn’t be fun without a little fun… 😉
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