How the Cookie Crumbles

An irreverant view of life after SIXTY-FIVE

Flash in the Pan – Mind

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Maxwell sauntered down the hospital corridor with new man Luke in tow. “Here’s the other patient shower room. Hey George. Come meet your new helper.” A bug-eyed bald man appeared from behind the curtain.

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“Nice day, Maxwell. Who’s this?”

“Luke is here for the summer. You’ll train him?”

“Sure, sure. Of course. Glad to help.” George’s spray-can clattered to the mosaic floor.” He bent to retrieve it.

Maxwell whispered. “Watch this.” He flicked on the shower.

“Dear, dear. Oh no.” George raced to mop water down the drain.

“Why doesn’t he…”

“Lost his mind.  Can’t think to shut it off.”

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The word limit for Mind is 100 words. I used them all.

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Author: Let's CUT the Crap!

I'm getting a little LONG in the tooth and have things to say about---ouch---AGEing. I believe it's certainly a state of mind but sometimes it's nice to hear that you're NORMAL. I enjoy reading by the truckload. I'm a grandma but I don't feel OLD although I'm not so young anymore. My plan is to stick it out as long as I can on this lovely planet and only will leave it kicking and screaming!

32 thoughts on “Flash in the Pan – Mind

  1. I don’t think I like Maxwell…

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  2. So clever, all the scene you conjure up, and this one something entirely new. A whole new twist on the characters as well, evoking some reactions over here. 🙂

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  3. Just enough creepy-factor, in time for Halloween!

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  4. Intriguing – but I am confused by characters George and Ziggy. Where did Ziggy come from?

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  5. I’d like to grab Maxwell and give hime an icy blast with the shower!

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  6. A nice piece of flash Tess 🙂

    Andro xx

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  7. That’s very sad! Poor George gets all wet!

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  8. Hi Tess, waiting for a book! 🙂

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  9. I’m completely lost – I can’t figure out how to post. I’m coming in at ‘Loco’ which is the direction I’m heading…

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  10. And who of the two is the more disturbed?

    Nice one!

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