Maxwell sauntered down the hospital corridor with new man Luke in tow. “Here’s the other patient shower room. Hey George. Come meet your new helper.” A bug-eyed bald man appeared from behind the curtain.
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“Nice day, Maxwell. Who’s this?”
“Luke is here for the summer. You’ll train him?”
“Sure, sure. Of course. Glad to help.” George’s spray-can clattered to the mosaic floor.” He bent to retrieve it.
Maxwell whispered. “Watch this.” He flicked on the shower.
“Dear, dear. Oh no.” George raced to mop water down the drain.
“Why doesn’t he…”
“Lost his mind. Can’t think to shut it off.”
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The word limit for Mind is 100 words. I used them all.
A new Fall Quarter of Flash has begun. The theme is Disturbed.
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October 15, 2013 at 7:51 pm
I don’t think I like Maxwell…
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October 15, 2013 at 11:11 pm
I do not either. Than YOU for feeling the same.
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October 15, 2013 at 8:12 pm
So clever, all the scene you conjure up, and this one something entirely new. A whole new twist on the characters as well, evoking some reactions over here. 🙂
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October 15, 2013 at 8:29 pm
Just enough creepy-factor, in time for Halloween!
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October 15, 2013 at 10:52 pm
Great. Lovely. Thank YOU! 😉
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October 15, 2013 at 9:51 pm
Intriguing – but I am confused by characters George and Ziggy. Where did Ziggy come from?
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October 15, 2013 at 10:11 pm
As you should be. A–c–k.. At the last minute, I decided Ziggy was too good a name for this character and changed it to George. *In too much of a hurry to put A + B + C. Too many A’s, B’s. and C’s. * *Forgiven? 😉 * *Thanks for the catch so I can update, Nancy. * *Hurry, hurry, drat, I hate that!*
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October 15, 2013 at 10:15 pm
I’ve done it!
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October 15, 2013 at 10:42 pm
Thanks for the heads up and for understanding. This is out secret. 😉
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October 15, 2013 at 10:49 pm
I make name changes and then go oo-psy. Thanks for the heads up, Nancy. I must have been waaaaaaaaaaaaay too passionate to notice where my head was until your sharp appraisal. 🙂 Thank YOU.
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October 16, 2013 at 1:59 am
I’d like to grab Maxwell and give hime an icy blast with the shower!
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October 16, 2013 at 9:07 pm
I’m first in line. Glad you love to do that. My job is done then? 😉
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October 17, 2013 at 5:32 am
A nice piece of flash Tess 🙂
Andro xx
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October 17, 2013 at 6:38 am
That’s very sad! Poor George gets all wet!
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October 17, 2013 at 5:35 pm
Thanks, Rose. Is your Gravatar blacked out?
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October 17, 2013 at 1:06 pm
Hi Tess, waiting for a book! 🙂
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October 17, 2013 at 5:32 pm
You are the kindest person. It’s in the works from 2012 NaNo. It’s a secret; don’t tell anyone. Sshh. 😉
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October 18, 2013 at 9:42 am
Oh Tess, I’m so excited for you!!!! 🙂
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October 18, 2013 at 3:11 pm
😉
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October 18, 2013 at 12:15 pm
I’m completely lost – I can’t figure out how to post. I’m coming in at ‘Loco’ which is the direction I’m heading…
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October 18, 2013 at 3:09 pm
How can I help? I don’t understand.
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October 18, 2013 at 3:38 pm
Either do I! Ok… Tell me if I’ve got it straight… in order to post a Flash from Wordpres select ‘link’ and paste their link ‘money… /flashfiction , Add title and text , use hashtags #loco, #postingfordummies, somewhere note how many words, hit publish and magically it shows up where it’s supposed to?
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October 21, 2013 at 5:40 pm
The word limit for *Mind* * *is *100* words. I used them all.
A new Fall Quarter of *Flash *has begun. The *theme* is *Disturbed.* Click: http://mommasmoneymatters.com/flash-fiction/ to check out the rules and join.
Copy and past the above three lines to the bottom of your post. Change how many words YOU used for your submission.
Go to the Momma’s Networked Blogs (Green Room). See upper left hand side of her page and register your name. Also subscribe to her newsletter if you haven’t already.
You Flash will automatically go to the right place after you’ve registered and you’ve done all the above.
Sorry, I know nothing about Twitter. Hope this helps? Let me know.
Tess
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October 25, 2013 at 7:54 am
Thanks for this – for whatever reason it’s just not working. I’ve done this pingback thing before and it works fine everywhere else.
I sent another message to RED – I give up.
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October 25, 2013 at 9:32 am
I’m sure she’ll fix you up. Keep the faith. 😉
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October 25, 2013 at 9:55 am
OK then, chin up!
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October 25, 2013 at 5:36 pm
😉
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October 19, 2013 at 10:43 am
Hilarious 😉
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October 20, 2013 at 3:01 pm
And who of the two is the more disturbed?
Nice one!
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October 20, 2013 at 4:02 pm
Thank YOU.
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October 21, 2013 at 2:17 pm
Love the pace with so few words. Great job.
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October 21, 2013 at 6:29 pm
Thank YOU. Glad you like it. 😉
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