How the Cookie Crumbles

An irreverant view of life after SIXTY-FIVE

Flash in the Pan – Erratic

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“Why do you whisper about me?”

“Am I whispering?”

Noreen peers through thin, lopsided bangs. “Always questions; never answers!”

“Your erratic behaviour…screaming, attacking patients, nurses… I’m worried about you.”

“It’s the meds doc, not me. Kiss me lover-boy and I’ll be good.”

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Dr. Snowden flinches, staggers upward and upends his chair. “Orderly, take her back.” He tosses an unsteady hand over his liver spotted scalp and sighs.” Nothing new I can do for your daughter.”

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The word limit for Erratic is 75 words. I used 75 words.

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Author: Let's CUT the Crap!

I'm getting a little LONG in the tooth and have things to say about---ouch---AGEing. I believe it's certainly a state of mind but sometimes it's nice to hear that you're NORMAL. I enjoy reading by the truckload. I'm a grandma but I don't feel OLD although I'm not so young anymore. My plan is to stick it out as long as I can on this lovely planet and only will leave it kicking and screaming!

31 thoughts on “Flash in the Pan – Erratic

  1. Snowden—The same name as the US secret-document leaker. Hmm, are you listening in on my phone calls? If you are, sorry to bore you… 😉

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  2. He seems a bit scared. 🙂

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  3. Dr. Snowden sounds like he’s on the same drugs as his patient. Interesting idea here. 🙂

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  4. Erratic behavior? Maybe just play acting to get better drugs! The doc seems stupid, not able to deal with a bit of bad behavior.

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    • That doctor, I wanted to slap him. He should retire. Was she playing with him or serious? What a ‘fraidy cat. Every single commenter is trashing the doctor. At last. Something works the way I want. 😉
      I sometimes love to not like a character.

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  5. Entering the above conversation….I question he’d be good, and I know he wouldn’t stay when I needed him.

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  6. This doctor is out of his depth!

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  7. Knocking the chair over is so visual–as is the ‘liver-spotted scalp’. Love it.

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  8. a bit sad, this one.
    Still good writing – as always.

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  9. Sounds so true. And so depressing.
    I like the doctor sighing, makes it so human.

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  10. Perhaps the doctor can use a little more compassion? 🙂

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  11. He could give her a good rogering, I guess. Many males believe that’s a pretty good cure-all, or so they tell me. But that wouldn’t be good bedside manner.

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  12. Love the liver spotted scalp!! Clearly the roles have been reversed and the girl had more control!! This was great sweety & loved the pic.

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