“Stop!” This isn’t funny anymore.”
Hands no longer playful, jabbed and bruised. Tickletickletickle.
“Marco, stop.” Beth squirmed, face crimson, hair plastered to rippled forehead.
“Ah, Cara Mia. You like this before.”
“Enough.” She pushed, slapped and clawed. Tears drenched apple cheeks. “Can’t breathe.”
An abrupt knock propelled him backwards on the mattress. Beth wiggled away.
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“What’s going on?”
“Door, she locked?”
“In my father’s house? You’re delirious.”
“You—out—before I shoot. You—cover yourself…”
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This is the new Fall Quarter of Flash in the Pan. The theme is Disturbed.
The word limit for Delirious is 75 words. I used them all again.
Click: http://mommasmoneymatters.com/flash-fiction/ to check out the rules and how to join.
How the Cookie Crumbles 
November 19, 2013 at 8:06 pm
Really good one, Tess. I know that first scene all to well, made me laugh. Still smiling. And, the twist it too. 🙂
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November 19, 2013 at 8:43 pm
So…you know Marco too? *wink*
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November 19, 2013 at 8:46 pm
Something tells me Daddy’s not pleased…
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November 19, 2013 at 9:11 pm
Watch that gun!
Bad daughter pushing her luck?
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November 19, 2013 at 9:15 pm
Or crazy dad with a bad temper.
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November 20, 2013 at 6:26 pm
I hope there’s a happy ending… 🙂
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November 19, 2013 at 8:48 pm
Ah loved the ending – well all of it – but those last two lines I laughed out loud. Very nicely done Tess 🙂
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November 19, 2013 at 9:10 pm
Thank YOU. Glad it worked for you. 🙂
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November 19, 2013 at 8:51 pm
When will people ever learn? Not in the house of the parents!!!!! 😉
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November 19, 2013 at 9:10 pm
Must have sounded dangerous, so… 🙂 appealing…
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November 20, 2013 at 8:28 pm
Hahahahahaha!
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November 22, 2013 at 12:38 pm
🙂
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November 19, 2013 at 10:05 pm
Wow, some guys don’t get it!
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November 20, 2013 at 6:23 pm
^-^
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November 21, 2013 at 9:41 am
I get you Tess! 🙂
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November 22, 2013 at 12:20 pm
😀
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November 19, 2013 at 11:47 pm
I would shoot first and then bark commands! hehe
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November 20, 2013 at 6:21 pm
Maybe he’s used to giving orders but was taken aback with his daughter’s indiscretion? 😀
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November 20, 2013 at 1:48 am
Whoops that’ll teach him!
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November 20, 2013 at 6:19 pm
She was asking for trouble all along, I think.
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November 20, 2013 at 6:50 am
I loved that ending so much! Love your writing, Tess 🙂
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November 20, 2013 at 6:16 pm
Your generosity warms me. Thank you. 🙂
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November 20, 2013 at 8:19 am
You are an excellent writer, Tess! This says so much in such a short story.
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November 20, 2013 at 6:15 pm
I’m tickled pink you like this. Thanks so much. 😉
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November 20, 2013 at 8:28 am
I actually saw that one coming, Tess…which likely proves we have the same ‘twisted’ minds! Write on…
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November 20, 2013 at 6:14 pm
Heh-heh-heh.
I’m in great company then. Thank YOU, Laurie.
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November 20, 2013 at 8:33 am
Great ending!
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November 20, 2013 at 6:13 pm
I’m pleased you think so. Thank YOU. 🙂
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November 20, 2013 at 10:10 am
Dad to the rescue 😉
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November 20, 2013 at 6:13 pm
Just in time 🙂
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November 20, 2013 at 11:51 am
I’m constantly amazed how much you say in so few words. Therein lies the strength of Twitter in education–encourage kids to say more with less.
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November 20, 2013 at 6:12 pm
You are too generous, Jacqui.
Maybe one of these days I’ll try Tweeter but it’s like learning a new language and I don’t have time for that right now. 😀
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November 20, 2013 at 2:19 pm
What a scene in 75 words! Great job. 🙂
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November 20, 2013 at 6:09 pm
Thanks so much. Glad you like it. 🙂
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November 21, 2013 at 6:23 am
Well done Tess. Methinks these are two badly behaved children and one mad papa.
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November 22, 2013 at 12:22 pm
Yep. I would say one of them should know better. 🙂
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November 21, 2013 at 11:44 am
I’m truly amazed at the way you write such incredible stories with so few words Tess, I was right there – and so was daddy 😉 Fantastic.
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November 22, 2013 at 12:20 pm
Sherri, thanks so much. Comments like this give me hope of improving my writing. 🙂
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November 22, 2013 at 2:01 pm
I LOVE your writing and I don’t think you need any improving at all 🙂
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November 23, 2013 at 3:01 pm
Nice to hear, Sherri. Warms my heart when I get positive and such glowing feedback.
Like a fine wine, I hope to improve with age and in writing.
😉
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November 25, 2013 at 7:54 am
Nothing like a fine wine 🙂
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November 25, 2013 at 5:01 pm
*burps* 😀
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November 26, 2013 at 12:05 pm
Ha Ha! Cheers 🙂
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November 26, 2013 at 12:43 pm
😉
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November 26, 2013 at 5:58 pm
🙂
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November 22, 2013 at 4:21 am
Sounds like Daddy came right on cue this time.
Personally, I find three people speaking without indications a bit hard to understand, and having to think about that takes away from the impact of the story.
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November 22, 2013 at 12:12 pm
Sorry. I should be getting better. The need is to have the ‘voice’ identify itself by how and what is spoken. I must work harder at this. 😦
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November 22, 2013 at 11:58 am
Loved it. So much said in so few words
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November 22, 2013 at 12:05 pm
Thanks so much. Glad you like this one. 🙂
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November 25, 2013 at 6:54 pm
This is an interesting one Tess 🙂
I hope that you are enjoying this
quarterly flashing 🙂
Andro xxxx
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November 26, 2013 at 1:05 pm
These are always fun, that’s why I have continued. I never know what will end up in the garbage and on the page. Also, it forces me to produce s.o.m.e.thing on a regular basis.
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November 26, 2013 at 5:57 pm
I am pleased that you are having fun with your FTP’s and by the way, there is no garbage in your Space I can assure you of that Tess 🙂 Have a lovely rest of evening and a wonderful Wednesday also 🙂
Andro xxxx
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November 26, 2013 at 6:00 pm
You are too kind, Andro. Thank you and the same to YOU.
😉
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November 25, 2013 at 7:00 pm
Are you able to get into Red’s M3 Space?
I have been unsuccessful today, but will be
trying again on the morrow 🙂
Have a lovely rest of evening Tess 🙂
Andro xxxx
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November 26, 2013 at 1:02 pm
I sent her an e-mail and she found and fixed the problem. She’ll be scarce for days getting ready for Thanksgiving.
Nice to hear from you, Andro. I see you’ve started into the flash. I can’t believe there only a month left.
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November 26, 2013 at 6:01 pm
Yes I have just four left to complete for this quarter so thankfully the target of 31st of December is easy, even though I was a tad late in starting this yime 😦
I too have had an email and now just need to pop back over there and read Red’s most recent postings 🙂 I had forgotten that it was Thanksgiving, I hope that you are ready for yours my lovely friend 🙂
Andro xxxx
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November 26, 2013 at 9:35 pm
Our Thanksgiving was second Monday in October but I’m ready for turkey anytime.
I have four as well but with the addition of HOT flashes. Must fit those in. 😉
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November 27, 2013 at 10:10 am
ndro xxxx
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November 27, 2013 at 3:31 pm
🙂
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November 26, 2013 at 6:49 pm
Yime is the same as time
but without the WHY 🙂 lol
Andro xxxx
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November 26, 2013 at 9:33 pm
🙂
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