“When’s the last time you saw her?”
“Hmm… ‘bout two months…I s’pose.”
“She’s your wife. Don’t you know…?”
“Kat pulled this trick plenty of times before.”
O’Brien gazed forward and nodded towards his partner behind the double-sided mirror. Shuffling the papers on the table, he nodded. “I see—you stopped worrying after too many disappointments.”
“Yeah. You know. I gave up. She’s mental, you know…”
That a medical term?” The detective peered up beneath his lashes.
“No doc told me nothing. She was messed up see…”
“Was…was—the last time I…”
“You kill her?”
“No way Jose. Do I look like a murderer?”
“What’s a murderer look like? Go on then, but don’t leave town.”
Cluckie checked the mirror, smoothed his black hair, and wiped his mechanic’s hands on his work-pants. In a flash, he was gone.
* * *
Newspaper headlines the next morning: Missing wife found, accused of shooting husband.
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December 10, 2013 at 5:40 pm
Oops! Didn’t expect that.
Poor guy, seems pretty clueless where his wife is concerned. But that doesn’t usually get you shot…
December 10, 2013 at 6:07 pm
Nice little twist,, 😉
December 10, 2013 at 6:16 pm
Nice twist at the end. 🙂
December 10, 2013 at 6:25 pm
Well….I didn’t see THAT coming! Well done!
December 10, 2013 at 6:29 pm
I concur, wonderful twist, didn’t see that coming! You come up with the best names Tess, they fit the characters so perfectly. I’m stunned that you tell such a gripping story in so few words. I know I sound like a broken record as I keep saying this but I really mean it!!
December 10, 2013 at 7:14 pm
Ooh, great twist. Did not see that coming! Nor did the husband, I suspect…
December 10, 2013 at 9:31 pm
Wadda surprise. More!
December 10, 2013 at 10:12 pm
Tess, conversation is your metier. A rare gift. Very, very good.
December 11, 2013 at 1:22 am
another one with a twist ~ love your dialogue Tess – well done 🙂 x
December 11, 2013 at 2:05 am
Hahaha I didn’t notice the last sentence the first time around!
December 11, 2013 at 5:34 am
Brilliant! You sure can write!
December 11, 2013 at 8:09 am
Love this one! Love the twist, never saw it coming.
December 11, 2013 at 12:11 pm
Amazing and fun!
December 12, 2013 at 9:45 am
December 12, 2013 at 9:56 am
Thanks so much, new friend. I appreciate the vote of confidence. 😀
December 12, 2013 at 2:17 pm
I agree with all the above comments. You write so well that I get engrossed in the story, I am in there with all the characters then I love the way I am left at the end with that…OMG factor with the twist. You are a gem of a writer.
December 13, 2013 at 2:44 pm
How do I say thank you to that. Thanks so much. You’ve made my week. 🙂
December 14, 2013 at 4:30 pm
Me neither! I mean, I didn’t see it coming either – I thought he’d skipped.
December 16, 2013 at 2:50 pm
Too easy if he just skipped. I think he’s odd but a good guy. 😛
December 15, 2013 at 2:12 am
Good one, Tess! You never know what is gonna happen!
December 16, 2013 at 2:46 pm