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Life and scribbles on the far side of SIXTY-FIVE

Flash in the Pan – Obsessed

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“I need my locks changed again.”

“Why?”

Louise exhaled and seized a handful of streaked hair. “Billy lost, then found the extra key.”

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“He’s returned it?”

“I don’t trust that woman we met at the party the night he gave me this ring.”

“So…”

“She grabbed my hand, ‘Look at this?’” she said and fluttered her fake lashes at Billy. Six months she pursued him until we broke up.”

“Devious.”

“He came begging for it last week—for her.”

Margie’s eyes bulged, her mouth as wide and round as a grapefruit. “I see you weren’t obliging.”

“He’s the one who proposed, and I accepted in good faith…and now…”

Insistent knuckles pommelled the door. “Excuse me.”

You! Get out.” Louise slammed the door and latched it. “It’s her; she’s obsessed with this ring, and dares come here?  How had he afforded something this incredible?”

“Might be hot?”

“Then, I’ll hide it.”

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This is for the Fall Quarter of Flash in the Pan. The theme is Disturbed.

The word limit for Obsessed is 150 words. I used them all.

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Author: Let's CUT the Crap!

I'm getting a little LONG in the tooth and have things to say about---ouch---AGEing. I believe it's certainly a state of mind but sometimes it's nice to hear that you're NORMAL. I enjoy reading by the truckload. I'm a grandma but I don't feel OLD although I'm not so young anymore. My plan is to stick it out as long as I can on this lovely planet and only will leave it kicking and screaming!

51 thoughts on “Flash in the Pan – Obsessed

  1. Okay…I’m just curious now. 🙂

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  2. A great story! Very powerful.

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  3. Might be hot! Oh boy, tell us tell us, what happens here. I want to know. Good hook, Tess! 🙂

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  4. and the plot thickens 🙂 x

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  5. Sounds like trouble is brewing.

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  6. BIG trouble…keep ’em coming 🙂

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  7. I don’t think it’s hot! I think it’s part of something else. It leads to greater treasure!!!!!!!!!!!!! (greater than him!). Another fabulous flash!

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  8. Tess, pulls you right into it in such a short time. Really good. Not a bling girl myself, but I do like to look at all the pretties in the jewelry store window. Nice writing. 🙂

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  9. And there really are women who are like that. It boggles the mind.

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  10. yes indeed, the plot does thicken…where is this going to end!!!

    Tess, Wishing you a magical Christmas season and all the good things in 2014! 🙂

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  11. You’re very good at these dark ones Tess 🙂

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  12. Ok I broke my rule…haha big surprise I bent it I mean lol I don’t read other flashes til i,m done with mine ..but I felt compelled and couldn’t resist today. Love the suspense.. ♥ Lizzie

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  13. 🙂 Now this is WordPress talent!? DId you ever write a book?

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  14. No need for you to blush. I will be in line for your book.

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  15. Over the top, Tess. I am a bit worried how your mind works like this. Hmm….That’s a lot of twists for so few words.

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  16. I am wondering what will happen next…

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  17. And you used them to full effect. Well done!

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  18. Very disturbing, I’m worried for her!

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  19. Sounds like someone had a narrow escape here!
    And if it’s hot, taking it straight to the police might be the perfect revenge…

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