How the Cookie Crumbles

An irreverant view of life after SIXTY-FIVE

Flash in the Pan – Gun

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Norman unwrapped the oil cloth with care, hands unsteady. His side-kick, Stinky, hiccuped and wiped damp hands on baggy jeans. “Give me some elbow room, will ya?” His taunt forehead glistened.

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“Lemme at it. You got ammo?”

“What for? Wow. It’s heavy but a good heavy.”

“Lemme at it.” Stinky’s hands shot out to grab the gun.

“Not yet.”

“Where’d you get it?”

“I’m holding for Butch’s friend—a favor.”

“My turn.” Stinky twirled the cylinder, released the safety, and aimed at Norman’s head.”

“Never point…”

Kapow!

Stinky dropped the piece. His jaw dropped. The clock struck four. He ran.

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The Winter Quarter of Flash in the Pan is here. The theme: Boys and Their Toys. For the rules and how to join, click: http://mommasmoneymatters.com/flash-fiction/

The word limit for Gun is 100 words. I used every last one.

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Author: Let's CUT the Crap!

I'm getting a little LONG in the tooth and have things to say about---ouch---AGEing. I believe it's certainly a state of mind but sometimes it's nice to hear that you're NORMAL. I enjoy reading by the truckload. I'm a grandma but I don't feel OLD although I'm not so young anymore. My plan is to stick it out as long as I can on this lovely planet and only will leave it kicking and screaming!

62 thoughts on “Flash in the Pan – Gun

  1. Having just written my first fiction piece for my blog I can only say what you do in 100 words is very clever. The flashiest of fiction 🙂

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  2. Then what happened?!?!?!?

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  3. Holy moly! It started like the Key Stone Cops with “Stinky hiccuped” and I’m smiling right up to “aimed at Norman’s head…” Pang! That his my gut. How’s that full length novel coming along, Tess? 😉

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  4. Good suspense piece. I will definitely be back to hear what happened!

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  5. Ouch! Those boys and the toys didn’t know how to play well. Great writing, really.

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  6. Oh dear Norman… I assume…dead? You really are into the boy stories of late aren’t you! 🙂 xx

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  7. Did you change your blog name? I almost missed you. Flash in the pan looks interesting, I’ll have to check it out. (I had to pile non-bagged stuff into my shopping cart and haul it out to the car today. This bag lady thing is going to be a challenge.)

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  8. Oh Stinky, Stinky, what have you done. You should know when Tess is writing she loves the end with a punch or a twist.
    Well done yet again Tess. It is amazing how such few words become such a completely engrossing story. Love it.

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  9. Brilliant and scarey 100 words Tess. Sadly, I can just imagine that happening.

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  10. Never give a gun to a man named Stinky. Stinkies have no impulse control.

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  11. Guess you just can’t trust a Stinky.

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  12. Oh, yikes. I hope what I think happened didn’t happen.

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  13. Norman bit the dust, as quickly as that…loved this Tess! I just don’t know how you write such great stories with so few words! Love the name Stinky. Brilliant as always 🙂

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  14. Tess: Bang and you had every element, every emotion and every descriptive wrapped up in your 100 words. Well done, as always.

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  15. Perfect Tess. In 100 words you show what happens every day in America. The dialog, also so well done.

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  16. This really did end with a bang.
    Well done.

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  17. Bang on, Tess! You got me! I don’t know anyone who can say so much so concisely!

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  18. I admire anyone that spin an interesting story in 100 words. Not being a writer, I would have a hard time myself.

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  19. You definitely have a way with FEW words, Tess. A gift I certainly missed, lol.

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  20. Ooops!
    I love the choice of names. With a side-kick called Stinky, I guess you’re simply asking for it 😉

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