How the Cookie Crumbles

Life and scribbles on the far side of SIXTY-FIVE

Flash in the Pan – Blocks

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Danny Maloonie ground his teeth for the third time in five minutes. Snow swirled and gusted across his windshield. The devil of winter and enemy of cars had arrived.

“Was snow forecast?” He glared at his younger brother, Frank, who shrugged.

“If it had, we’d still have to get home.”

“Yeah, yeah. Dad would pop a kidney if we didn’t come when summoned.” Danny slumped.

1971_dodge_challenger-pic-3053“What could have happened?”

“I don’t care. Damn snow. I’m not ready to put this car on blocks for the winter.”

“It’s a car, bro, not your girlfriend.”

“What do you know? A’71 Dodge Challenger is special, and I paid for it myself.”

“Turn that up, will you?” The announcement blared, ‘Mattress King, Sean (Shinbone) Maloonie has suffered a heart attack…’ Frank cut the radio.

Mouths dropped, the young men gawked at each other. “Uncle Sean? No way,” they said together.

Frank blinked. “Poor Dad.”

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The Winter Quarter of Flash in the Pan is here. The theme: Boys and Their Toys. Rules and how to join, click: http://mommasmoneymatters.com/flash-fiction/

The word limit for Blocks is 150 words. I used them all.

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Author: Let's CUT the Crap!

I'm getting a little LONG in the tooth and have things to say about---ouch---AGEing. I believe it's certainly a state of mind but sometimes it's nice to hear that you're NORMAL. I enjoy reading by the truckload. I'm a grandma but I don't feel OLD although I'm not so young anymore. My plan is to stick it out as long as I can on this lovely planet and only will leave it kicking and screaming!

49 thoughts on “Flash in the Pan – Blocks

  1. Yikes, what a way to find out.

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  2. Oh no…that’s terrible! I do just have to ask once again Tess, are you absolutely sure that you didn’t know my ex? He had one of these babies…except it was blue 😉

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  3. At least they know what to expect 😦

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  4. I loved it a real socker!!

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  5. shocker even .. off to bed before I fall asleep on the laptop and dribble into the keyboard!………….. OMG messy! 😉 xxxx

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  6. Two brothers growing in their relationship….to find out their father just lost his brother. How sad. 😦

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  7. A terrible way to receive the news. Ugh! Well written Tess!
    The car definitely reminds me of my younger days.:)

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  8. You have done a great job with this by taking it to a higher level of personal interest at the same time keeping well in the parameter of the theme.

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  9. Not the best way to find out. Hard to hide from terrible news in today’s world.

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  10. you are right into the boy stories and doing a good job, let’s hope Uncle Sean recovers from the H.A !

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  11. Tess, this was well done. You make this look so easy. Not only did you use all the words, but you used the key word in a setting I would have never thought of. And then you grab our hearts in such an unexpected way as well. This one is a keeper!

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  12. ‘Pop a kidney’–I’m working my mind around that one. Another great tightly-woven scene. I get a lot from reading how you put so much into so few (words).

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  13. I really enjoy your writing. Descriptions are so well done, Tess. 🙂

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  14. I agree, yikes! That’s not what I’d want to hear coming through the speakers. 😦

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  15. Another yikes here! Terrible way to find out. Shows how real you write, Tess! 🙂

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  16. That looks like a car my brother rebuilt, it was his girlfriend I swear. Perfectly done (again) and I loved the twist in the end. You are just getting better and better!

    (Check swirl first paragraph).

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  17. It sometimes takes me a while to get back, but I do get here eventually!

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  18. Challenging story!
    My husband has a 1970 Dodge Challenger T/A. I don’t think it would get out of the garage if there was even a hint of bad weather!

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  19. It’s a car, bro, not your girlfriend: lol! How do you think of these things?
    Sad ending. Thoughtful of the young man to feel for his dad.

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