Danny Maloonie ground his teeth for the third time in five minutes. Snow swirled and gusted across his windshield. The devil of winter and enemy of cars had arrived.
“Was snow forecast?” He glared at his younger brother, Frank, who shrugged.
“If it had, we’d still have to get home.”
“Yeah, yeah. Dad would pop a kidney if we didn’t come when summoned.” Danny slumped.
“What could have happened?”
“I don’t care. Damn snow. I’m not ready to put this car on blocks for the winter.”
“It’s a car, bro, not your girlfriend.”
“What do you know? A’71 Dodge Challenger is special, and I paid for it myself.”
“Turn that up, will you?” The announcement blared, ‘Mattress King, Sean (Shinbone) Maloonie has suffered a heart attack…’ Frank cut the radio.
Mouths dropped, the young men gawked at each other. “Uncle Sean? No way,” they said together.
Frank blinked. “Poor Dad.”
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The Winter Quarter of Flash in the Pan is here. The theme: Boys and Their Toys. Rules and how to join, click: http://mommasmoneymatters.com/flash-fiction/
The word limit for Blocks is 150 words. I used them all.
How the Cookie Crumbles 
March 11, 2014 at 5:34 pm
Yikes, what a way to find out.
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March 12, 2014 at 4:07 pm
Life, as they say, happens. 😦
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March 11, 2014 at 6:02 pm
Oh no…that’s terrible! I do just have to ask once again Tess, are you absolutely sure that you didn’t know my ex? He had one of these babies…except it was blue 😉
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March 12, 2014 at 3:58 pm
Ha ha. Let me check my crystal ball. Back in a minute.
Thanks for waiting. Yep I see it there now. It wasn’t there yesterday. 🙂
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March 13, 2014 at 8:48 am
Ha ha 🙂
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March 13, 2014 at 1:06 pm
😉
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March 11, 2014 at 6:04 pm
At least they know what to expect 😦
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March 12, 2014 at 3:56 pm
At first I had the uncle die but decided that to be too hurtful. 🙂
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March 11, 2014 at 7:06 pm
I loved it a real socker!!
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March 12, 2014 at 3:53 pm
Thanks, Willow. Glad you enjoyed it. 😉
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March 12, 2014 at 4:42 pm
🙂 I was not expecting that to come out of the blocks!
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March 12, 2014 at 8:15 pm
Me neither. I couldn’t think for the longest time what blocks had to do with boys and their toys. Ha ha.
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March 12, 2014 at 8:21 pm
Well you did a great job.
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March 13, 2014 at 1:21 pm
*smiles*
Thanks so much, Willow.
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March 11, 2014 at 7:07 pm
shocker even .. off to bed before I fall asleep on the laptop and dribble into the keyboard!………….. OMG messy! 😉 xxxx
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March 12, 2014 at 3:52 pm
*nods*
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March 12, 2014 at 4:41 pm
🙂
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March 12, 2014 at 8:15 pm
😛
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March 11, 2014 at 8:52 pm
Two brothers growing in their relationship….to find out their father just lost his brother. How sad. 😦
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March 12, 2014 at 3:44 pm
Life happens. Wish some anxious journalist hadn’t been in such a hurry though but then the boys took their sweet time I think. 😦
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March 14, 2014 at 6:38 am
Journalists sometimes screw things up. 😦
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March 14, 2014 at 5:16 pm
Too anxious to have something to submit. Eeeek
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March 11, 2014 at 11:36 pm
A terrible way to receive the news. Ugh! Well written Tess!
The car definitely reminds me of my younger days.:)
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March 12, 2014 at 2:37 am
You have done a great job with this by taking it to a higher level of personal interest at the same time keeping well in the parameter of the theme.
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March 12, 2014 at 3:38 pm
Sometimes I wonder if I’m on the right path. You warm my heart. Thank you, Rose.
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March 12, 2014 at 7:02 am
Not the best way to find out. Hard to hide from terrible news in today’s world.
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March 12, 2014 at 3:35 pm
If the car suitor had been so in love with his car, they might have made it home before some rushed journalist got wind of the news. 🙂 Ha ha.
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March 12, 2014 at 7:35 am
you are right into the boy stories and doing a good job, let’s hope Uncle Sean recovers from the H.A !
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March 12, 2014 at 3:34 pm
Thanks, Jen. I athink he will. 😀
My first kick at the can was that he died. Too sad.
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March 12, 2014 at 10:17 am
Tess, this was well done. You make this look so easy. Not only did you use all the words, but you used the key word in a setting I would have never thought of. And then you grab our hearts in such an unexpected way as well. This one is a keeper!
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March 12, 2014 at 3:32 pm
Wow. I appreciate your kind words, Eleanor. Thank you. 😉
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March 12, 2014 at 10:57 am
‘Pop a kidney’–I’m working my mind around that one. Another great tightly-woven scene. I get a lot from reading how you put so much into so few (words).
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March 12, 2014 at 3:26 pm
So nice you get lots out of these, especially since I am usually tongue-tied. I appreciate your positive input. Thanks so much, Jacqui. :-d
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March 12, 2014 at 11:13 am
I really enjoy your writing. Descriptions are so well done, Tess. 🙂
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March 12, 2014 at 3:25 pm
Thanks so much, Paulette. I try to keep up with you. 🙂
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March 12, 2014 at 12:26 pm
I agree, yikes! That’s not what I’d want to hear coming through the speakers. 😦
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March 12, 2014 at 3:22 pm
Nope, but the boys haven’t hurried when advised to come home pronto either. That’s my take, and you know how journalists are: always in a rush. 😉
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March 13, 2014 at 8:31 am
Another yikes here! Terrible way to find out. Shows how real you write, Tess! 🙂
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March 13, 2014 at 1:08 pm
You are most generous. Thank you, Michelle.
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March 13, 2014 at 9:01 am
That looks like a car my brother rebuilt, it was his girlfriend I swear. Perfectly done (again) and I loved the twist in the end. You are just getting better and better!
(Check swirl first paragraph).
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March 13, 2014 at 1:05 pm
Done. Thanks for the heads up and for your generous feedback, Val. You’ve made my week. 😀
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March 13, 2014 at 9:10 am
It sometimes takes me a while to get back, but I do get here eventually!
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March 13, 2014 at 10:59 am
🙂
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March 13, 2014 at 1:26 pm
Challenging story!
My husband has a 1970 Dodge Challenger T/A. I don’t think it would get out of the garage if there was even a hint of bad weather!
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March 13, 2014 at 1:27 pm
*smiles*
Boys and their cars.
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March 15, 2014 at 1:32 am
Amazing!
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March 15, 2014 at 5:06 pm
You are a sweet soul, Sheri. Thank YOU.
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March 23, 2014 at 2:18 pm
It’s a car, bro, not your girlfriend: lol! How do you think of these things?
Sad ending. Thoughtful of the young man to feel for his dad.
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March 23, 2014 at 2:30 pm
The one with the car is so into his car and himself. Made me mad so I hoped the younger brother would make up for it.
Thank you for reading and your kind comments K.
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