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Flash in the Pan – Models

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Tiny led the way, cupping his hand at shoulder height in a come-hither fashion.

Creak.

“Ahh.” His friend, Sammy, whimpered and bit a knuckle as he crashed into the hallway wall.

“Don’t be such a girl. Do you want to see or not?” Tiny turned the glass doorknob to the last room.

“W-oo-w! How come you never showed me before?” Sammy shoved up his thick glasses.

Tiny pushed out his chest and rocked on his heels. “Didn’t think you’d be interested?”

“Awesome. How many models are here?”

“About a hundred, different years and makes. Don’t touch.”

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“Took your brother a long time, huh? You ever help?”

“Nah. The glue smell makes me puke.”

“This black car—oops.”

“I said…”

Sammy’s mouth dropped. Eyes enormous, he let out a squeal.

Creak.

On his knees, ears on fire, Tiny’s chin whipped over his shoulder.

“What are you boys doing in here?”

“Becca.”

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The Winter Quarter of Flash in the Pan is here. The theme: Boys and Their Toys. For rules and how to join, click: http://mommasmoneymatters.com/flash-fiction/

The word limit for Models is 150 words. I used them all.

Author: Let's CUT the Crap!

I'm getting a little LONG in the tooth and have things to say about---ouch---AGEing. I believe it's certainly a state of mind but sometimes it's nice to hear that you're NORMAL. I enjoy reading by the truckload. I'm a grandma but I don't feel OLD although I'm not so young anymore. My plan is to stick it out as long as I can on this lovely planet and only will leave it kicking and screaming!

40 thoughts on “Flash in the Pan – Models”

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  1. rarasaur
    March 16, 2014 at 5:26 pm

    150 words well used! I cringed at the “oops” – poor toys! 🙂

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  3. The Persecution of Mildred Dunlap
    March 16, 2014 at 6:56 pm

    The attitude’s screaming off the page are great! “Don’t be such a girl,” and the response to asking if he ever helps! Another good one, Tess.

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  4. nancyrae4
    March 16, 2014 at 7:59 pm

    Wonderful as always. You’re tempting me to try this flash writing, but since I rarely write anything shorter than a thousand words, I’ll just let you do your magic;)

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  5. sknicholls
    March 16, 2014 at 8:10 pm

    Loved this. I enjoyed model cares and boats as a child and preteen.

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  7. sueslaght
    March 16, 2014 at 11:25 pm

    Tess my anxiety level shot through the roof when the kid dropped it. Oh-oh there is going to be trouble! another great piece.

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  8. ramblingsfromamum
    March 17, 2014 at 12:16 am

    o oh they’re in trouble. Another fine little piece Tess. 🙂

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  9. Sherri
    March 17, 2014 at 5:43 am

    The tension and trouble looming is palpable in this story Tess! Wonderful 🙂

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  10. Glynis Jolly
    March 17, 2014 at 10:17 am

    Visions of the boys I used to babysit long ago came to mind. All four probably would have done something like this.

    I loved this. 😀

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  11. heylookawriterfellow
    March 17, 2014 at 11:22 am

    Ooh, and those models are sooo delicate.

    Great story as always, Tess — and that isn’t the model glue talking! 😉

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  12. D.G.Kaye
    March 17, 2014 at 1:00 pm

    You are the master of flash! Perhaps one day you may write sequels to where you leave us hanging? 🙂

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  13. Jacqui Murray
    March 17, 2014 at 3:59 pm

    It would be interesting to read how you put one of these together. So much in so few (words). First step…

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    • Let's CUT the Crap!
      March 18, 2014 at 3:15 pm

      I don’t have a process or a formula. Sometime I can seize the moment and then fix it till it works. Other time I use a hammer to see what falls out of my head. I AM a person of few words in real life but writing is easier than talking. You can’t erase or delete a slip of the tongue in real life, only on the keyboard.
      This round of flashes have been a bigger challenge than previous one because I know nothing about boys. I grew up in a houseful of girls. Ha ha. I have to make this stuff UP. 🙂 🙂 🙂

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  14. Lucid Gypsy
    March 17, 2014 at 4:28 pm

    Whoops, but kids can’t resist can they?

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  15. The Writing Waters Blog
    March 17, 2014 at 5:24 pm

    You’re ver good at the cliff hanger. Is that how you lead your life?

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  16. sheridegrom - From the literary and legislative trenches.
    March 18, 2014 at 8:08 pm

    Tess, you’ve gone and done it again! Perfect!
    Having grown up with 6 older brothers, your theme of boys and their toys always calls back memories of my brothers and now of them as men with their toys. (It’s the same song but faster music on higher priced instruments).

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  17. Valentine Logar
    March 19, 2014 at 7:18 am

    Oops? Oh, those boys are in deep doo now. You have done it again, tension built and down they go. You are doing a great job with this series Tess.

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  18. Delft
    March 23, 2014 at 2:24 pm

    Oops.
    How much can you say with a single word? Great trick of not actually telling us what happens.
    A bit mean, of course 😉

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  19. Naomi Baltuck
    March 24, 2014 at 11:59 am

    Oh, dear…once again, Tess, you have managed to convey so much so quickly. Well done!

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