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100-Word Challenge for Grown-ups – Week #138

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The prompt is: …but what is the prompt?… + 100 words

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MESS-UP

“Expect the team at 1:00 p.m. Friday.” The cashier handed Ellen a receipt, who skimmed the itemized list and frowned.

“Only two for the setup?” Her sister slumped beside her. She grabbed her wrist. “I’m paying for three?”

“No, Ma’am.”

“Write guaranteed on-time on the invoice.”

The sisters raced to the car. “This is it.” Ellen winked. “What wrong, Trace?”

“I’m nervous. What if I mess-up?”

“No way.” She patted her shoulder.

“But, but what is the prompt? When does everyone shout Surprise?”

“We’ll enter the living-room and you’ll flick on the lights.”

“Hope Mom doesn’t have a heart attack.”

“You agreed.”

“Still, Mom’s 85.”

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Author: Let's CUT the Crap!

I'm getting a little LONG in the tooth and have things to say about---ouch---AGEing. I believe it's certainly a state of mind but sometimes it's nice to hear that you're NORMAL. I enjoy reading by the truckload. I'm a grandma but I don't feel OLD although I'm not so young anymore. My plan is to stick it out as long as I can on this lovely planet and only will leave it kicking and screaming!

61 thoughts on “100-Word Challenge for Grown-ups – Week #138

  1. I’m sure she will love the surprise. But what is being set up?? And to be honest if I was standing in the group I don’t know if I would yell surprise or just kind of whisper it. 😉

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  2. This one kept me guessing, Tess. Well done!

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    • I wonder if it’s a cultural difference, my rushing to the end in my excitement or worrying the old lady might die of a heart attack when everyone yells ‘Surprise.’ I h.a.t.e. when this doesn’t jell.

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  3. My mom just turned 80…. 🙂

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  4. I just smiled….Wonderful writing as always! 🙂

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  5. Oh Lord Tess, please don’t tell me their are getting Mom a stripper. 😉

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  6. Tess \I love this piece. We had several surprise parties from my Grandma in her mid 90s/ People would say what if she dies of a heart attack? I would say then she is going to go happy. She loved parties. 🙂

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  7. Very well done coming up with something so clever for this impossible prompt!

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  8. I couldn’t imagine holding a surprise party for my mum, she would whinge why all the people are there …you did well as usual hun ❤ x

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  9. The most important to us all, mums… loved mine and still do… 😉

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  10. Knowing my mother, who is 75 and quite healthy but HATES surprises, I think this is one the few things that might kill her. Well done, my friend.

    Hugs from Ecuador,
    Kathy

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  11. What is the surprise I wonder, apart from the shouting? I love a party and hope to even when I’m 85…I’ll just be glad to get to that age hopefully 😀

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  12. You leave us hanging from the beginning and the end. I love your crafty wit! 🙂

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  13. Tess, I enjoyed this use of the non-prompt. I wouldn’t have thought of a party so great idea. 🙂

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  14. Oh my the tension in this is palpable, and that’s good writing! As usual. ❤

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  15. Hi Tess,
    This is a fun story, and I love the conversation that it prompted. Have you ever seen Elmore Leonard’s “Get Shorty”? I think that is the movie with a an old crime boss climbing lots of stairs up to a place where the mob is waiting to surprise him, and the thinkable occurs.

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  16. I love surprises! The only surprise party ever thrown in my honor did include everyone yelling at me, which surprised me, but did not involve walking into a dark room. When I see that in movies I always think wouldn’t that be odd, who doesn’t leave a light on when they plan on coming home after dark *shrug*. Great story and use of the prompt 🙂

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  17. I loathe parties and can’t think of a worse thing than a surprise party! It will never happen though, thank goodness. But I love your little story – had me hooked, though I’m still puzzling about the invoice.
    Jude xx

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  18. I confess I don’t like surprises.
    Lovely twist 🙂

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