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100-Word Challenge for Grown-ups – Week #146

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This week’s prompt:  …with your going comes the past…

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ALWAYS

Busy hands, but racing heart—nothing helped—washing; ironing; packing. Tears leaked and memories replayed.

When I grow up, I’m gonna marry you.’ The scrawny blonde boy with bruised knees and scabbed elbows; dirty nails and muddied shoes—perfect. My heart twists still.

“Let’s go, Ma. We’re ready to roll.”

I grab the snacks and wink. “What’s the rush? You heading somewhere special—college maybe?” With your going comes the past, but though soon you’ll be a man, you’re still my precious boy.

“Hey. Put me down!”

“Swing your partner, dosie-doe.”

“Enough.”

“I’ll be home for Christmas.”

Not Thanksgiving?

“I’ll be fine. Don’t worry.”

“Never.” Always.

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Author: Let's CUT the Crap!

I'm getting a little LONG in the tooth and have things to say about---ouch---AGEing. I believe it's certainly a state of mind but sometimes it's nice to hear that you're NORMAL. I enjoy reading by the truckload. I'm a grandma but I don't feel OLD although I'm not so young anymore. My plan is to stick it out as long as I can on this lovely planet and only will leave it kicking and screaming!

75 thoughts on “100-Word Challenge for Grown-ups – Week #146

  1. Touching! You captured it.

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  2. As many are going through this right now, it is perfect. A great piece of writing in a few words.

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  3. I think you captured many parents emotions a t this time of year when so many are off to school, off to college and now sending their own off to school. wonderfully written as always Tess.

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  4. Oh those tender moments in life. Very, very good.

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  5. I’ll be facing this in another year. I think you captured it perfectly. Sniff.

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  6. I can so relate to this. “If you love something, set it free…… ”
    But how hard it is to deal with the emotions that come with this expression of love.

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  7. A poignant story played out over and over. The “never” part is sooo real.

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  8. Really great and intense start that sustained all the way through. Great job!

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  9. My online writing blog is thinking of doing this. I feel like an old hand at it, after seeing you participate–and doing so myself at least once!

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  10. It still brings tears to my eyes when I remember my kids leaving! Very poignant Tess, thanks.

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  11. Mine are grown. There’s a bittersweetness to it. My son has had a bit of trouble adjusting, some psych issues. I hope one day he will be able to overcome, but I love him regardless.
    Thank you for visiting The Diary of Debauchery.

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  12. Aw Tess…… that sure captured a moment of parental bliss/fear/love/sadness/joy. You are the emperor of the 100 word story.

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  13. Heart-wrenching. Wonderful dialogue. Beautifully told story of a mother’s bravery at letting her child go with love, joy and pride yet holding in the deep pain and sorrow of doing just that. Hoping already for a soon homecoming. I’ll be with my boys this weekend down in Brighton for an early birthday get together and when we leave I’ll be saying “So when are you next coming home?” It never goes away does it…? ❤ ❤ ❤

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  14. Ya know, Tess, it almost reads like a poem. Very well done.

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  15. You rock at these short writing challenges Tess. Nice work! 🙂

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  16. Is is always never or never always?

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  17. Great writing as always, Tess ❤

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  18. A moment in time beautifully caught. xx

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  19. You took me back to when my eldest daughter left home, I stood in the laundry with her just washed clothes in a basket and I held them to my face, saying I won’t be running a wash with her stuff again 😦 Kids leaving for school, college, or home..all teary moments. Sorry so long replying, you are the 100 worder expert 🙂 x

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  20. Things I remember…. how gently you crushed my heart…

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  21. Dropping by to see how your morning is going (✿◠‿◠)

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  22. It’s hard to set your children free into this world, knowing what we know. However, we want them to have the best experiences possible. It’s a tough balance and you’ve done an exquisite job of wrapping it up and presenting it to us as a gift. Thank you.

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  23. Great take on the prompt. Mine hasn’t left home yet but your 100 wc sets the scene perfectly 🙂

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  24. Your witty writing style can take us through the ages; with a minimal amount of words, life passes. 😉

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  25. Awww, whether the first day of kindergarten or off to University it is the sending them off. You captured that feeling just perfectly. ❤

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  26. Love it. Brief and poignant; thank you for liking my post on letters. I can identify with much of yours- 65ish, single now, loving writing and totally committed to it… and yes, I plan to live as fully as, until…shall enjoy reading your blog.

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  27. What a great piece, Tess! Seriously, you captured a mother entering a new phase in her life: trying to let go of the boy, knowing that he is on his way to independence and manhood. There is so much to life about this story – the boy picking up his mother and twirling her about (rather like the about-turn of life as we go through various stages), the boy promising to be home for Christmas (not Thanksgiving? – what a nice touch), the nostalgia. Really, a super job!

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  28. Reblogged this on Odyssey of a Novice Writer and commented:
    Just one hundred words to tell a story, and what a job she’s done! Enjoy Tess’s poignant story. Note how well she underplays the emotion and how, in doing so, she pulls us in.

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