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100-Word Challenge for Grownups – Week #148

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This week’s prompt is … as the waves gently lapped I … +100 words

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FLIGHT

My blood rumbled like thunder. No-one knew what I’d done across the water. Yet. Fist to mouth to stop from screaming, I struck my teeth, hard. Now bloody knuckles too.

I peeked out beneath the tarp of the boat I’d anchored earlier. Dawn yawned wide across the empty lake and beach.

Scratch-scratch.

I kept still as death. Was that outside or in?

I spotted the rat beyond my feet and it wasn’t Johnny. He was dead. As the waves gently lapped I tore back the canvas and raced across the sand. Another rat too many for me. I needed fresh clothes, a bath, and a manicure.

 

© 2014 TAK

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Author: Let's CUT the Crap!

I'm getting a little LONG in the tooth and have things to say about---ouch---AGEing. I believe it's certainly a state of mind but sometimes it's nice to hear that you're NORMAL. I enjoy reading by the truckload. I'm a grandma but I don't feel OLD although I'm not so young anymore. My plan is to stick it out as long as I can on this lovely planet and only will leave it kicking and screaming!

77 thoughts on “100-Word Challenge for Grownups – Week #148

  1. Dark and malevolent. Nice.

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  2. WOW! I want more. Please, write more of this story… You are beyond amazing with these.

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  3. I always get excited when I see another one of these! You have true talent.

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  4. I take from this that Johnny was a rat of the two legged variety! Well done Tess. You really are superb at this.

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  5. Oh! You are such a girl!!

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  6. Oh good Lord. That is grim! Remind me to not take a boat trip with you!

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  7. Yikes! I am deathly afraid of r…ts. Can’t even say the word. This was very good!

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  8. You are really good at these stories. I too look forward to reading them 🙂 I have to admit I missed the fact that Johnny was a 2-legged rat. Duh. Thank god for other people’s comments 😉

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  9. Yes, a good manicure always sends one on to a better frame of mind!

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  10. Oh, fantastic, Tess! Plunged smack into action and mayhem and then that ending! Great! Huntie

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  11. Wow Tess you have me on the edge of my seat with this thriller. My knuckles hurt at the description. Well done!

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  12. Oh my goodness you can’t leave us wondering about this one, there’s a book waiting for you to write!

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  13. Ooh what has she been up to? Great piece.

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  14. Rays and manicures and what happened prior and what is to come. A nice one to leave us guessing about Tess xx

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  15. That’s a character I’d love to travel with. Killed someone, frightened of a rat–and lists a manicure in the top three things she just must have. I’m going to steal this gal!

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  16. Another story leaving us wondering. Excellent Tess! One day you will write complete stories for all these cliffhangers! 🙂 xo

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  17. Yikes…that’s an attention grabber. 😉

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  18. Tess! How deliciously creepy!

    A murder implied… And the rustling sound of scurrying rats… Was it in your protagonist’s mind, feeling guilt, or something else?

    You write beautifully.

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  19. Your command of these shorts is fabulous! Loved this one, terrible and terrific. A manicure? Wonderful.

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    • Thank YOU, Val. Nice to see you like. Makes me happy. ><3

      Her work is done. She happened to break a nail. What else can she want but fresh clothes and a manicure. That Johnny really was a BIG rat, don't you think. She has no qualms, nothing, no guilt. I believe she feels FREE. 😀 😀

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  20. Ha! Small nail for a big rat?

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  21. Fabulous. The bit about the manicure was inspired! Hugs!

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  22. Haha. and I thought Johnny was a real rat, like that Ben rat movie from years ago. Sometimes I am such a duh! thank you so much for following me all the way over to Aki no Koe. you are a dear.

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  23. Tess – I actually understand this one! Here lately I can be more than a bit dense in my head. Your exquisite line, “My blood rumbled like thunder. No-one knew what I’d done across the water.”
    Often I wished I could apply that old slogan of, ‘What happens in Vegas, Stays in Vegas,’ when I’ve come back from a trip abroad but it never seems to work that way.
    I specifically enjoyed your line, “Dawn yawned wide across the empty lake and beach.” The senses that line awakens in my body and soul sets me on fire.
    I’m with you – I haven’t time in my world for rats, insects, spiders and snakes and all that stuff that plagues earth.

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  24. You have me wanting more.

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  25. Wow…one dead rat, of the two legged kind. What tension! I agree with TB, I want more too… 🙂 ❤ 😀

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  26. An enticing glimpse. What about giving us the whole story?
    Johnny the rat…,but real rats are nice animals!

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