How the Cookie Crumbles

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100-Word Challenge for Grownups – Week #165

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This week’s prompt is …the suitcase lay open… + 100 words

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BUCKLE UP

“What are you doing?” Dolores sagged against the doorjamb.

He ignored her. The suitcase lay open like a guilty yawn.

“Charles? Talk to me.”

Rubbing his ear, he exhaled. “I’m in serious trouble—”

“You—?” Her fingers clutched her throat.

“I’m leaving.”

“I don’t understa—”

He sighed. “The name’s not Charles.”

Flushing, she chortled. “I know who I married.”

“I’m not your husband. I’m his brother.”

“He has a brother?”

“Had. My brother’s dead.”

Dolores dissolved into the floor. “I killed him two years ago.” He snapped the case shut and stepped around her. “Over you.” He paused. “I’m sorry. Forgive me.”

 

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Author: Let's CUT the Crap!

I'm getting a little LONG in the tooth and have things to say about---ouch---AGEing. I believe it's certainly a state of mind but sometimes it's nice to hear that you're NORMAL. I enjoy reading by the truckload. I'm a grandma but I don't feel OLD although I'm not so young anymore. My plan is to stick it out as long as I can on this lovely planet and only will leave it kicking and screaming!

70 thoughts on “100-Word Challenge for Grownups – Week #165

  1. “The suitcase lay open like a guilty yawn” … the setup for what was to come. What a seriously twisted little plot in so few words!!
    I loved it 🙂

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  2. Wow, that’s a good one. Just like the commenter above, I love this line: “The suitcase lay open like a guilty yawn.” Very clever.

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  3. Reblogged this on Smorgasbord – Variety is the spice of life and commented:
    Tess Karlinski the ace of 100 word stories has done it again… a little late night thriller…

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  4. Like Joanne the phrase ‘the suitcase lay open like a guilty yawn’ had me intrigued. My mouth dropped open as the lines went on. Wow Tess you had me on the edge of my seat.

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  5. Wow. This was a slammer Tess. Good job.

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  6. another brilliant starter for ten ()or one hundred in this case!)

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  7. Wow, that packed a punch! Lot happening fast and furious, great descriptions, especially of the yawning suitcase. Love that one. Good job, my friend. 🙂

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  8. Count me in for loving “The suitcase lay open like a guilty yawn.” Loved the last paragraph – my mind was jumping with images. Well done, Tess!

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  9. Now that is twisted. The only question remaining is: Why’s he leaving?

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  10. I loved the “guilty yawn” thing too. Perfect. But holy crap! That one packed a wallop! Great job, Tess. Hugs! 😀 ❤

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  11. wow……oh wow…..and she didn’t know the difference between the two brothers? were they twins? I want some more of this story!!!!!!

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  12. Love this bit, “I’m not your husband. I’m his brother.”
    “He has a brother?”
    “Had. My brother’s dead.”

    And it all started with an open suitcase… or ended with one, depending on how you look at it.

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  13. Tess, you nailed it with this one. So crisp and powerful! Brava!

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  14. Wow, that was unexpected! Talk about a terrible twin! Great twist, perfectly presented. 🙂

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  15. Another twisty one. Like the others, love the suitcase line, well done again darling.💜 xx
    Do you follow Michael at summerstommy ? I think you would enjoy his writing, he’s also written for this prompt.

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  16. Sure sure….I’ll forgive you…. no problem! HOLY CRAP!!!! 😦 Poor Dolores. How do you keep doing these Tess?? Well done!!!

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  17. And in the end, happiness eluded him! He thought killing his brother for his brother’s wife would scratch the itch and bring him happiness. Instead, it brought him misery. Guilt? A fine little morality tale with a dose of horror thrown in! Well done, Tess!

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  18. WOW! Thats the kind of thing thrillers are made of! Great again Tess, I loved it 😊

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  19. Wow! This could be expanded into a longer story, even a book.

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  20. Good grief Tess where did this one come from? You are awesome!

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  21. I didn’t see that coming. You got my eyes to pop out with this one.

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  22. Tess…Master of the Briefest and Best Stories.

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  23. Great story! So much said in so few words and like so many, I too loved the words ‘guilty yawn’.

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  24. You are a wordsmith extraordinaire! Truly you get better and better, with each of these. I absolutely loved this one, the set up and the finale were perfect and with so few words.

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  25. Amazing to get such a big picture with so few words. Superb!

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  26. Ooh yes, very twisted, but quite delicious too 🙂

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  27. I couldn’t help but begin to imagine the conversation that follows your story. Well done Tess.

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  28. ‘…like a guilty yawn.’ Oh that just puts the whole story on the map, and this map tells one heck of a story – with a punch. Very serious trouble. Great stuff Tess, wonderful flash… ❤ 🙂 ⭐

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