How the Cookie Crumbles

Life in the fast and slow lanes after SIXTY-FIVE

100-Word Challenge for Grownups – Week #167

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It’s that time again. Check the link below to join in:

https://jfb57.wordpress.com/2015/02/10/100-word-challenge-for-grown-ups-week167/

The prompt this week is the photo below (What are they saying?)

Julia Word Challenge 167

NO TATTLE, NO TALE

 Ralph gripped the railing. “We can’t ignore this.” He rubbernecked the close passers-by.

“I retire in a week.”

“Listen to yourself? Who are you?”

“It’s been one hitch after another.” Bill scrubbed his forehead. “This mall is jinxed.”

“What about public safety? You’re the chief engineer.”

“I’m dog-tired.” Bill shoved the clipboard towards his subordinate.

“Think of your legacy. The crack is widening—”

“Too late for me.” Bill’s voice faltered like coarse sandpaper.

“What?”

“I’ll be dead in a month.”

“Come again?”

“You handle it.” Hands in his pockets, Bill trudged away, back almost straight.

“How, Billy? Come back.”

 

© 2015 All Rights Reserved Tess and How the Cookie Crumbles

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Author: Let's CUT the Crap!

I'm getting a little LONG in the tooth and have things to say about---ouch---AGEing. I believe it's certainly a state of mind but sometimes it's nice to hear that you're NORMAL. I enjoy reading by the truckload. I'm a grandma but I don't feel OLD although I'm not so young anymore. My plan is to stick it out as long as I can on this lovely planet and only will leave it kicking and screaming!

40 thoughts on “100-Word Challenge for Grownups – Week #167

  1. I could see this happening. Excellent use of the photo prompt.

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  2. Wow, great and mysterious beginning. I certainly want to know where this is going. 🙂

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  3. You always leave us wanting more. What a tense conversation in the midst of all the goings on.

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  4. The statues do look like they’re having a serious conversation. That seemed very real, Tess. Kudos again! 🙂

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  5. What a great opening for a book. Love it.

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    • OMG. You’re RIGHT. I might manage a short 3,000-word short story–100 words at a time to see what happens. Thanks for the kick in the pants, Jacqui. Please do not expect an update daily or weekly. This will be one piece for submission if I can find a good spot once I’m satisfied. ❤ ❤ ❤

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  6. Oh you rat! What a fantastic story, Tess! My mind flew in 15 directions at once. Great job!

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  7. Where is this?! I don’t want to go there!!!! You’re brilliant Tess. They do look that serious, don’t they?

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  8. Another brilliant piece Tess. I could really visualize the conversation at that railing and the concern on the faces of both of them.

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  9. This story is very poignant given the events that happened at the shopping mall in Elliott Lake a few summers ago. How sad that this could have been a very real conversation.

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    • I lived in Elliot Lake for about three years and many years after heard about the collapse of the mall in the upper circle. Mind-boggling, indeed. How this small piece came about was a memory about a mall built in my city over 30 years ago and the rumors there was a ‘crack’ in the foundation. It’s going strong 30+ years later. Whew. ❤

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      • Sometimes I think we take for granted that professionals will do their job … well, professionally. The reality is that not all of them were at the top of their class, and even the most meticulous people make mistakes. Your story really highlighted that!

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  10. Tess you are so creative, I love the way your mind works – overtime! With this one I really think you should continue please, but its Bill’s story I want with the mall as the sideline!

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  11. Great prompt use Tess. Short, concise and pointed. Cursed or just plain tired? Afraid of the future or predicting the future? You just get better and better.

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  12. You captured my imagination! I want to know what happens next! Great writing, Tess!

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  13. Love this…I looked at the photo and got excited right away thinking, hmmmm…how is Tess going to write this? Really got my juices flowing as it leaves me with a sense of doom and hopelessness in a situation when someone gives up on life. Which of course, poor Bill has. Brilliant this Tess, brilliant… ❤

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  14. Love this, especially as it’s in a mall near me! Even though it’s been there a while I still do a double take sometimes. I do hope the mall doesn’t fall down though 😀

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  15. Pure dialogue and yet it says so much! I feel like I know both of these characters. Well done!

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  16. What a fine job with this prompt, Tess! Very imaginative. The weariness, the hopelessness came through, and the lack of interest Bill had in his own legacy. His life was ending… so was his commitment to others. His friend was taken aback from the change in him, and then by the reason why. Excellent!

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