How the Cookie Crumbles

Life and scribbles on the far side of SIXTY-FIVE

100-Word Challenge for Grownups -Week 157

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This week’s prompt is … at last we were free… + 100 words

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A New Page

Trina had to pull herself together. I need a cold shower. She pounded on her roommate’s bedroom door. Quiet as a tomb.

“Sarah. Wake up.” Trina squinted at the clock down the hall. “Come on, kiddo.” She gave the door another whack and proceeded to the bathroom and turned the water on. Then off. Odd. She paused. Blinked. And retraced her steps. “Time to sober up.” She turned the knob. “It’s Graduation Day. Remember we said we were free to start… Sarah…? A new page for the rest of our lives?

“You’re so cold.”

Oh. My. God.

Where’s my cell? “I need an ambulance. Hurry-please!”

The End

© 2015 Tess and How the Cookie Crumbles All Rights Reserved

Author: Let's CUT the Crap!

I'm getting a little LONG in the tooth and have things to say about---ouch---AGEing. I believe it's certainly a state of mind but sometimes it's nice to hear that you're NORMAL. I enjoy reading by the truckload. I'm a grandma but I don't feel OLD although I'm not so young anymore. My plan is to stick it out as long as I can on this lovely planet and only will leave it kicking and screaming!

46 thoughts on “100-Word Challenge for Grownups -Week 157”

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  2. kanzensakura
    June 30, 2015 at 6:44 pm

    OMG indeed. Wow. What finish to this! You can pack so much into so few word. I wish I had this talent.

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  3. Bruce Goodman
    June 30, 2015 at 6:54 pm

    Dead on! Great story, thanks.

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  4. susartandfood
    June 30, 2015 at 7:04 pm

    Tess, really great how you pack all that information into such a small area and make it exciting. As for me I tend to be wordy.

    Susie

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  5. John W. Howell
    June 30, 2015 at 7:07 pm

    A lot of action is a small amount of words. Sadly this happens a lot.

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  6. Victo Dolore
    June 30, 2015 at 7:09 pm

    Gave me chills. 😉

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  7. The Persecution of Mildred Dunlap
    June 30, 2015 at 7:16 pm

    Wow, what impact with so few words. Rings very true, Tess.

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  8. D. Wallace Peach
    June 30, 2015 at 8:41 pm

    She is free, but not quite how she planned. A whole story in 100 words! Excellent.

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  9. teagan geneviene
    June 30, 2015 at 8:54 pm

    Good reminder for this holiday weekend, huh? Whether Canada Day ot the Fourth. I’m sorry the prompt took you to a dark place, Tess. But I think that means it was important for someone, somewhere to hear the story. It definitely felt real. Well done. Mrga hugs. 🙂

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  10. Jacqui Murray
    June 30, 2015 at 9:04 pm

    Oh how awful.n A nightmare. Your brain is scary, Tess.

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  11. edwinasepisodes
    June 30, 2015 at 9:17 pm

    You have that knack of saying so much in so few words. What a sad story.

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  12. Naomi Baltuck
    June 30, 2015 at 9:36 pm

    So sad, Tess, but it has the ring of truth to it. You are an expert at painting a verbal picture with a few delicate strokes.

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  13. davidprosser
    July 1, 2015 at 1:06 am

    Smokin’ Tess. That was an excellent story to manage in full in so few words. Great impact. Congratulations.
    xxx Massive Hugs xxx

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  14. Rosie Amber
    July 1, 2015 at 2:22 am

    Such a sad way to go.

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  15. Lucid Gypsy
    July 1, 2015 at 3:54 am

    This is so sad and it has happened too many tines, alcohol is a demon.

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  16. vanbytheriver
    July 1, 2015 at 4:04 am

    That’s brilliant and scary all at once, Tess. It does happen, and what a shame to be cut down in life in the middle of what should be celebration. Well done !!

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  17. Kate Loveton
    July 1, 2015 at 6:35 am

    Oh my! Sad – too late to start that new page now. A stunning and unique take on the prompt, my friend.

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  19. Sue Slaght
    July 1, 2015 at 8:22 am

    Tess after a few weeks I come back to see you can have me in the edge of my seat in just a few words. Your skill in creating suspense continues to amaze me. Great to read your work again!

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  20. Cathy
    July 1, 2015 at 8:26 am

    Oh, my. Very real and very sad. I love the way you do that ❤

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  21. joannesisco
    July 1, 2015 at 9:18 am

    So dark and tragic 😦

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  22. Chatter Master
    July 1, 2015 at 9:36 pm

    Oh…..no……. 😦 the horror of this reality. I’m glad “this” one is only fiction.

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  23. belindacrane
    July 1, 2015 at 10:52 pm

    Ouch …. Tess …. ! You just punched me. Really hard as well. This was absolutely brilliant. 🙂

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  24. olganm
    July 2, 2015 at 11:13 am

    It takes one’s breath away. Scary thought…

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  26. sheridegrom - From the literary and legislative trenches.
    July 3, 2015 at 3:07 pm

    Tess – I held my breath – I knew that ominous first knock on the door had to be the key to your limited word count. You are such a master in playing with our emotions. How long before you’re going to have a book of these fabulous stories to publish?

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  27. valentinelogar
    July 4, 2015 at 7:09 am

    Tess! What a way to start a new chapter to life, so cold so dead on. ❤

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  28. jfb57
    July 5, 2015 at 6:23 am

    What a graduation day that was Tess! Just like you to find the darker side of such an event. Beware the demon drink I say! Thank you for joining 100wcgu!

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  29. Let's CUT the Crap!
    July 6, 2015 at 11:15 am

    Thanks so much for these challenges, Julia. I look forward to your prompts every week in the hope of stretching myself. Thank YOU, for being here. ❤ ❤

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  30. reocochran
    July 19, 2015 at 10:28 pm

    This was such a suspenseful and interesting part of a story. I suppose there is no hope she can be revived? 😦 I liked the way you made this so “real.”

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