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Genre: Folklore
Prompt: Shine
Words: 700
See No Evil
COUNTRY LIVING HELD NO INTEREST FOR ZELDA, but she changed her mind after meeting Harvey. A red-haired free spirit, she jumped at the chance to attend a party with the well-to-do stranger. Well, they had crashed grocery carts and he apologized by buying her a coffee. Now, the idea was nothing but hard work.
No rain for months, dust stole inside though Zelda had wound the windows tight. Lost was not a place she liked. The gasoline level in the Dodge Dart hovered around a quarter tank. Where was that fancy house Harvey said to meet him at the party?
A thermos empty of water lay on the passenger’s side of the car’s bench seat. Her small purse leaned against it. A white-knuckled grip on the steering wheel numbed her hands but she paid no attention. Where were the farmers or cows? The only living creatures soared overhead. What were they? Buzzards? No, not large enough. Crows? Why so many and nothing else around?
Zelda passed a dilapidated shack. Hope flared. She slowed. Nobody. Nothing moved in the crushing heat. Parched and sweating, she swallowed to work up saliva without success. The crows swarmed lower, beady eyes scanning the interior of the car as if on a mission.
An enormous lump in her throat brought tears to her eyes. She unpeeled her grasp on the steering wheel and pounded it with the heel of her palm. Had she taken the wrong country road? What if she ran out of gas? A mere three or four hours of daylight remained. What if the crows surrounded her car? Creepy.
Like a shimmering mirage, women in long summer gowns dotted an expanse of velvet green lawn straight ahead. Men in black ties and fancy suits bent an ear to them, swirling filled glasses. A smile as broad as Saturday night replaced Zelda’s earlier sagged cheeks. A Victorian-themed party.
Zelda beeped the horn and turned into the long drive. No one took notice. Puzzled she beeped again, catching a glimpse of her glistening forehead and frizzy hair. She drove to the back of the mansion. Where were the cars? Too hot to think, she snatched the white purse and headed to the trunk for her luggage. “Whoa.”
A David Niven character studied her movements as if memorizing each one. Hands deep in his pockets, his eyes were sharp as a bird’s.
“Harvey. That you? Thought I’d taken a wrong turn. What is this place? Where are the other houses?”
Knees limp as cooked noodles, she remembered his slow smile from the one other time they had met. He snatched her bag. “Come. It’s cooler inside. Freshen up and we’ll dance your cares away.”
And how they danced, he the perfect partner, self-assured and charming. She did not remember how the night ended.
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By morning, the air had cooled. Zelda’s body ached in all the wrong places. The urge to stretch overcame her before she opened her eyes. She screamed but what came out was the yowl of an angry cat. She noted with horror how she itched from the scratchy grass where she had slept. Outside? In the grass? A compulsion to groom gripped her. She choked on her own black fur. Fur? But it does shine. I’ve gone mad, haven’t I? Where is the mansion?
The rattles and clicks of a hundred crows swooping and calling to each other broke the silence. To the uninitiated ear, it sounded like raucous laughter over a private joke. One called to another and they plunged like bullets for the skulking black cat in the overgrown field.
“Zelda. Come back. Has no one told you the love of money is the root of all evil?”
A mansion had existed one hundred years before. One sad night a meeting of magicians had pushed their luck too far. Someone changed a famous woman named Lady Noir to a black cat and no one knew how to change her back. The magicians dispersed. When asked, they had no knowledge of the lady’s whereabouts.
Every summer afterward, a handsome man invited an attractive woman to a party where the mansion once stood and she too disappeared.
End
© 2017 Tess and How the Cookie Crumbles
Images courtesy of Pixabay
February 21, 2017 at 4:41 pm
Good story. You need to put these in a special scary story edition. They will sell like hot cakes.
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February 24, 2017 at 12:54 pm
Thank you, John. 🙂
Ha ha. You think so? Trying out different genre, I don’t know where these stories come from. I can’t say they’ve been easy. More like a headache and then I wonder who wrote them.
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February 24, 2017 at 3:53 pm
There you go. Genius at work.
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February 21, 2017 at 5:17 pm
This one has given me goosebumps, still rising as I write this. A really gripping story, Tess, with spookiness escalating from beginning to end.
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February 24, 2017 at 12:55 pm
I rewrote this sucker three times and then I had two endings. My brain had a hard time with this genre.
Good to hear about the goosebumps, though. Ha ha. Boo!
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February 21, 2017 at 6:44 pm
Ooooo…! Great, atmospheric story, Tess. Mega hugs.
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February 24, 2017 at 12:57 pm
You like this? Thank you, Teagan. Trying new genres is quite a headache… I mean experience. Not sure I’d like to keep switching too long.
I rewrote this three times and had two endings. I almost deleted it. Sigh.
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February 21, 2017 at 7:34 pm
Zelda Zelda Zelda….did no one ever tell her to trust her gut????
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February 24, 2017 at 12:58 pm
Ha ha. Exactly. A nice face and a big smile and that’s one bad boy. I don’t trust them myself.
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February 21, 2017 at 9:23 pm
Oh that is creepy. Though, How bad could it be to live eternity as a cat?
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February 24, 2017 at 12:59 pm
Ha ha. Which comes first? Eternity or nine lives. Or are they the same? 😉
Creepy is good. I tried real hard, Jacqui. 😀 😛
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February 21, 2017 at 11:44 pm
Tess a darker side than usual. Gripping as always!
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February 24, 2017 at 1:01 pm
You like this? Thank you, Sue.
Messing around with different genres feels I’m turning into a Jekyll and Hyde. 😛 😛
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February 22, 2017 at 1:37 am
Well written and surprising Tess with a smooth transition from human to feline!
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February 24, 2017 at 1:02 pm
Thanks so much, Gilly. ❤
I rewrote this a number of times. I even have another story that didn't make it and had two endings. Couldn't pick one so I just pointed and that was it. This genre switching is hard.
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February 22, 2017 at 2:52 am
Ooh, I love this story, Tess. What a great twist!
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February 24, 2017 at 1:04 pm
Thank you, Cathy. ❤ I thought about this for days, rewrote and rewrote and couldn't decide on an ending so just pointed at my screen. Whew. This was a mind bender to do.
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February 24, 2017 at 1:31 pm
It worked! 🙂
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February 22, 2017 at 7:26 am
Oh, Lord. This is good!
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February 24, 2017 at 1:05 pm
I am sooo tickled you like it, Linda. Thank YOU. This one was w.o.r.k.
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February 22, 2017 at 12:30 pm
Ok that’s another brilliant one!! 💗💜
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February 24, 2017 at 1:06 pm
I’m pleased you like this, Willow. Thank YOU. Had to do some heavy lifting. Thought I’d never finish.
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February 22, 2017 at 2:20 pm
Ohhh that was a great story Tess. I love the dark twist too ! 🙂
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February 24, 2017 at 1:08 pm
Thanks so much, Judy. This was a puzzle.
I’ve read some dark folklore and legends. Wasn’t sure this one would pass.
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February 22, 2017 at 8:18 pm
Thanks, Rachael. ❤ 😛
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February 22, 2017 at 8:34 pm
Zelda is now a cat?! You surprised me! Clever tale. Also, it’d be fun to go to a Victotian theme party. 🙂
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February 24, 2017 at 1:11 pm
Ha ha. Thanks so much, E.E. I cooked my brains writing this one. A tricky genre. Rewrote this a number of times, ended up with a story I kicked to the curb, and had two endings. Yeah. I can drive this bus. Tee hee.
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February 22, 2017 at 9:10 pm
Wow! Fantastic suspense, horror and mystery. Great writing my friend. 🙂
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February 24, 2017 at 1:13 pm
Thank you, Debby. ❤ I now need a holiday. By the way, you're enjoying dry weather and sunshine as I write this, correct?Good for you. I shouldn't complain. Our weather has been unusually spring-like but temps are going down for the weekend.
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February 25, 2017 at 10:22 am
Lol Tess. I’m home for a short few days. Off to the dry this Wednesday. It was nice to come back to the mild before the sh***t hits the fan LOL 🙂 ❤
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February 23, 2017 at 7:03 am
Nicely done; I didn’t see that twist coming! The pictures were a nice touch, too.
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February 23, 2017 at 11:27 pm
Oh, My! Great scary story, Tess! You’re good at that! 🎶 Christine
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February 24, 2017 at 1:14 pm
Thank YOU, Christine. This is supposed to be folklore and I’ve read some spooky kinds. Guess it rubbed off on me.
Happy weekend. 🙂
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March 5, 2017 at 10:34 pm
Thank YOU, Christine. I’m getting some kind of workout. Won’t do Sci-fi though. Sigh. 😀 😦
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February 25, 2017 at 12:14 am
Wow, first of all, I loved this story! After reading some comments, you really did nail this story. Like you would “say” C.R.E.E.P.Y. 🙂 I’ll never look at black cats the same way again!
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February 27, 2017 at 10:51 pm
Why you bloggers think I have done well, it surprises me because writing out of my genre–don’t even know what it is–I must have learned something along the way. Doing it full time, probably not. My head hurts, know what I mean?
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February 27, 2017 at 11:33 pm
Some writers are born, Tess, you must be one then 🙂 I could never do this full time! Too much pressure from my POV!
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February 25, 2017 at 2:24 pm
My mouth went dry reading about the car trip. This is quite different for you Tess … you weave a good tale regardless of the genre.
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February 27, 2017 at 10:55 pm
Ha ha. Bless you, for reading and your positive comment, Joanne. Anytime I think of a car ride gone wrong (getting lost), I get thirsty. Glad you did too. And it was hot plus no a/c. Perfect. Thirst rules.
Not my genre but an opportunity to try something different. Don’t know how long I’ll last with the different genres–Some are just not in my mindset. ❤ ❤
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February 28, 2017 at 7:27 am
For me, it doesn’t help that I get a bit car sick, so I always have water in the car with me … even on short trip to the grocery store. My mouth seems to turn to chalk as soon as I get inside a vehicle. So yes, this story really struck a nerve with me {shudder}
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February 25, 2017 at 9:54 pm
HOW’D YOU DO ALL THAT IN 700 WORDS?! Yowzie, that was mesmerizing and scary and just real enough to be super creepy. Great job. This story is going to stay with me tonight. YIKES! Thanks a lot. 🙂
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February 27, 2017 at 10:57 pm
Awesome. Thank YOU, Pam. If you got it/enjoyed it, I’m over the moon. Not my genre and these change from week to week. Not sure how long I’ll manage to stretch my poor brain into unfamiliar territory. Ouch.
❤
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March 1, 2017 at 10:09 am
I think that as we explore different genres, we can be surprised what we thought was ‘not our genre’ is not the case anymore…! Keep your mind (and pen) open for those surprises. xo
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February 28, 2017 at 12:32 am
This is different for you, Tess. I love the creepy anniversary event–I’ve been thinking of writing something a little longer using Bastille Day. Great contrast between the crows and the cat. I can totally see them taunting the poor new kitty.
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March 5, 2017 at 10:32 pm
Thank YOU, Cathleen. With a new genre every week, I’m scrambling to stay with the flow. Not Sci-Fi, though. Can’t manage that.
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