Ellen’s fore-finger traced the flowered pattern on her summer skirt. “You have to talk to me, Frank.”
He leaned forward, a white-knuckled stranglehold on the steering wheel.
“We can’t dance around this any longer.”
He flicked a cursory glance towards her. “Chill, it’s no big deal.”
She pressed her lips together. “Chill?”
“Must you analyze everything to death?”
“Is it a cocktail party or a dinner? I have to know…what to wear, Frank.”
“O-h…that…”
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August 13, 2013 at 9:23 pm
I admire your ability to convey such a story in 75 words! You tempt me to join these brevity-based brouhahahs… 😀
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August 16, 2013 at 4:02 pm
Thanks for your nice comment.
Come ooonnn down.
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August 14, 2013 at 1:41 am
U-oh, seems they have more to they need to talk about.
Though I’m not sure why she nearly cries…
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August 16, 2013 at 4:00 pm
I changed the crying. Didn’t sit well with me either. She becomes frustrated.
I do like that you are honest about your questions, which helps me see weaknesses to fix.
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August 14, 2013 at 3:13 am
Ooo there hides a guilty man!
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August 16, 2013 at 3:59 pm
Of whatever’s on his mind is more important causing him to be uncommunicative.
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August 14, 2013 at 5:45 am
I don’t feel good about him…..or should I feel bad for him?
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August 16, 2013 at 3:57 pm
Neither. I wasn’t sure I’d manage clarity here. He’s got something on his mind and that’s all that’s important to him lately. He hasn’t been communicative either and she’s frustrated. Different agendas?
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August 17, 2013 at 11:36 am
I read this a couple of times. At first I felt bad for her like she was trying so hard “for” him. Then I read it as he couldn’t understand why she gets so worked up over something that he sees so simple and he doesn’t get this….
SO many possibilities!
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August 18, 2013 at 1:07 pm
YES! I hoped for the possibilities. To me he thinks what’s on his mind is more important.
Thank you for the come-back, Colleen. I appreciate hearing if my efforts work.
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August 18, 2013 at 8:54 pm
I love your flashes! They work for me.
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August 14, 2013 at 10:31 am
Hmmmmmmmm, what’s he up to. You paint a great image with your descriptions. So easy to visualize the scene. Really brings it to life.
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August 16, 2013 at 3:45 pm
Thank you, Paulette. I wasn’t sure if this one was clear: each in their own world = frustration.
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August 14, 2013 at 12:04 pm
Guilty conscience! It is going to be a long ride. 😉
xxx
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August 16, 2013 at 3:43 pm
Thanks, Red. Funny when two people have separate agendas.
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August 14, 2013 at 12:47 pm
You got me going in just 75-words!!!
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August 16, 2013 at 3:41 pm
Nice to hear. Hope the meaning was clear. Thanks, Cee.
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August 14, 2013 at 12:52 pm
Oh boy!!!
misunderstandings – brilliantly portrayed Tess!!
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August 16, 2013 at 3:41 pm
Thank YOU, Ghia. I wasn’t sure if I was clear about the situation.
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August 14, 2013 at 10:52 pm
It’s always the guy, is it?
=)
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August 16, 2013 at 3:38 pm
Not at all. Sometimes two people have different agendas and don’t listen to each other. Yes?
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August 16, 2013 at 3:50 pm
Yes, exactly!
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August 15, 2013 at 4:33 pm
I believe Ellen needs to beat something out of him. Good conversational story my friend.
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August 16, 2013 at 3:27 pm
Thank you, Valentine.
I wish she would. He’s isn’t listening because he has something else he’s on his mind…ignoring the little woman. Haha.
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August 18, 2013 at 8:11 am
I think he’s guilty! BAD man! Lucky she’s thinking about the dress.
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August 18, 2013 at 12:53 pm
Yes, guilty of not communicating with his wife and thinking what’s on his mind isn’t good enough to share. Each in his / her own priorities. Heh heh.
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