How the Cookie Crumbles

An irreverant view of life after SIXTY-FIVE

Flash in the Pan – Delirious

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“Stop!” This isn’t funny anymore.”

Hands no longer playful, jabbed and bruised. Tickletickletickle.

“Marco, stop.” Beth squirmed, face crimson, hair plastered to rippled forehead.

“Ah, Cara Mia. You like this before.”

“Enough.” She pushed, slapped and clawed. Tears drenched apple cheeks. “Can’t breathe.”

An abrupt knock propelled him backwards on the mattress. Beth wiggled away.

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“What’s going on?”

“Door, she locked?”

“In my father’s house? You’re delirious.”

You—out—before I shoot.  You—cover yourself…”

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This is the new Fall Quarter of Flash in the Pan. The theme is Disturbed.

The word limit for Delirious is 75 words. I used them all again.

Click: http://mommasmoneymatters.com/flash-fiction/ to check out the rules and how to join.

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Author: Let's CUT the Crap!

I'm getting a little LONG in the tooth and have things to say about---ouch---AGEing. I believe it's certainly a state of mind but sometimes it's nice to hear that you're NORMAL. I enjoy reading by the truckload. I'm a grandma but I don't feel OLD although I'm not so young anymore. My plan is to stick it out as long as I can on this lovely planet and only will leave it kicking and screaming!

61 thoughts on “Flash in the Pan – Delirious

  1. Really good one, Tess. I know that first scene all to well, made me laugh. Still smiling. And, the twist it too. 🙂

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  2. Something tells me Daddy’s not pleased…

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  3. Ah loved the ending – well all of it – but those last two lines I laughed out loud. Very nicely done Tess 🙂

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  4. When will people ever learn? Not in the house of the parents!!!!! 😉

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  5. Wow, some guys don’t get it!

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  6. I would shoot first and then bark commands! hehe

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  7. Whoops that’ll teach him!

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  8. I loved that ending so much! Love your writing, Tess 🙂

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  9. You are an excellent writer, Tess! This says so much in such a short story.

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  10. I actually saw that one coming, Tess…which likely proves we have the same ‘twisted’ minds! Write on…

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  11. Dad to the rescue 😉

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  12. I’m constantly amazed how much you say in so few words. Therein lies the strength of Twitter in education–encourage kids to say more with less.

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  13. What a scene in 75 words! Great job. 🙂

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  14. Well done Tess. Methinks these are two badly behaved children and one mad papa.

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  15. I’m truly amazed at the way you write such incredible stories with so few words Tess, I was right there – and so was daddy 😉 Fantastic.

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  16. Sounds like Daddy came right on cue this time.
    Personally, I find three people speaking without indications a bit hard to understand, and having to think about that takes away from the impact of the story.

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  17. Loved it. So much said in so few words

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  18. This is an interesting one Tess 🙂
    I hope that you are enjoying this
    quarterly flashing 🙂

    Andro xxxx

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  19. Are you able to get into Red’s M3 Space?
    I have been unsuccessful today, but will be
    trying again on the morrow 🙂

    Have a lovely rest of evening Tess 🙂

    Andro xxxx

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  20. Yime is the same as time
    but without the WHY 🙂 lol

    Andro xxxx

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